公园— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid repetition and fix tense/word form errors (e.g., "bring brought" → "brought"). Use a linking word when adding the memory (e.g., "For example").

示例: Yes — I loved going to parks as a child. For example, my parents often took me to a large park near our home where we flew kites on the lawn, which left me with many happy memories.

建议: Make the response grammatical, reduce hesitations, and be specific about frequency and activities. Use linking words (e.g., "also" or "because") to connect ideas. Replace vague phrases like "every now and then" with clearer frequency (e.g., "a few times a week").

示例: Yes — I still go to parks regularly. I live near a large park, so I usually visit a few times a week to walk and exercise, and I often see many local residents exercising there.

建议: Respond with a clear opinion and give a precise reason. Remove fillers and explain the "20-minute park" idea briefly and clearly. Use linking words like "because" or "therefore" and correct plural/singular forms ("parks play").

示例: Yes — I would. I believe more parks are needed because the "20-minute park" concept means people should have a green space within a 20-minute walk, which helps reduce stress in big cities like Beijing.

建议: Give a clear answer naming the parks and describe specifically why you want to visit them. Avoid confusing phrasing and incomplete sentences. Use linking words (e.g., "because", "for example") and correct word order (e.g., "Temple of Heaven").

示例: Yes — I want to visit the Temple of Heaven and the Temple of Earth because both parks are peaceful. For example, the Temple of Heaven has quiet gardens that help me relax and feel refreshed.

× Yes, I liked going to park very much.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks very much.

Use plural 'parks' because 'going to park' is uncountable here; we refer to parks in general. Use 'parks' or 'the park' depending on meaning. Suggestion: say 'going to the park' for a specific park or 'going to parks' for parks in general.

× My parents often took me to the parks around my house.

✓ My parents often took me to the parks around my house.

This sentence is correct for plural usage; no change needed. Kept for completeness.

× I remember we were flying kites on the beautiful large lawn there and it bring brought a lot of beautiful memory back to me.

✓ I remember we flew kites on the beautiful, large lawn there, and it brought back a lot of beautiful memories for me.

Use simple past 'flew' instead of 'were flying' for a recollected complete past action. 'Bring brought' is redundant; keep 'brought' (past). Use plural 'memories'. Word order: 'brought back' is the correct phrasal verb and 'for me' clarifies beneficiary.

× Yes, and now becomes a habit for me.

✓ Yes, and now it has become a habit for me.

Missing subject 'it' and present perfect 'has become' is appropriate to express a change up to now. 'Becomes' alone is awkward; 'has become' fits the current state.

× I managed to go to the park, umm, every, every now and then, uh, actually I live near a huge park, umm, a lot of the local people were uh, doing exercise over there, even some celebrity.

✓ I manage to go to the park every now and then. Actually, I live near a huge park where many local people exercise there, and even some celebrities do.

Use present simple 'manage' for habitual action. Remove stuttering. Change 'were doing exercise' to simple present 'exercise' for routines. Use plural 'celebrities' and include auxiliary 'do' for clarity. Also avoid redundant 'there' after 'where'.

× Yes, I'd love to, you know, there is a theory about 20 minutes park, uh, to help people to relax, especially in big city like Beijing, people need to need a space, uh, for relaxation.

✓ Yes, I'd love to. There is a theory about a '20-minute park' to help people relax. Especially in big cities like Beijing, people need a space for relaxation.

Use adjective form '20-minute' and remove extra 'to' after 'help'. Change 'big city' to plural 'big cities' when speaking generally, and remove duplicated 'need to need'. Simplify sentence splitting for clarity.

× I think park play important role in providing such a.

✓ I think parks play an important role in providing that.

Use plural 'parks' to match plural verb 'play'. Add article 'an' before 'important role' and change vague ending 'such a' to 'that' or 'such a space' to complete the noun phrase.

× I never get bored too with it the tempo of heaven and also the temple of earth.

✓ I never get bored with the Temple of Heaven and the Temple of Earth.

Original has wrong word order and extra words. Use correct proper nouns 'Temple of Heaven' and 'Temple of Earth'. Remove 'too' and 'it the tempo of heaven' which are incorrect. Keep present simple 'never get bored' for a general truth.

× I think these two parks give me a sense of for tranquillity in inside my heart and every time I went I go there, I feel like I was nourished by the.

✓ I think these two parks give me a sense of tranquillity inside my heart, and every time I go there, I feel nourished.

Remove redundant prepositions: use 'a sense of tranquillity' (not 'of for'), use 'inside my heart' (not 'in inside'). Use present simple 'go' for habitual action, and 'feel nourished' completes the thought; avoid unfinished clause 'by the' or mixing past 'was' with present habitual context.