公园— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be concise, use past tense consistently, correct grammar (plural/singular), and choose precise words. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases like “live game.”

示例: Yes — I loved going to parks as a child. I often went there with my parents, my brothers and my friends, and we would play games like tag and have picnics on the grass.

建议: Make sentences shorter and avoid repeating words (e.g. “now”). Use clear reasons and linking words (e.g. “however,” “because”). Keep tense consistent and correct small errors (e.g. article use).

示例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks; however, I rarely go at the moment because I am studying for my graduation and don’t have much free time.

建议: Answer directly, use correct grammar (e.g. subject-verb agreement, countable nouns), and complete your sentence. Add a brief reason or example with a linking word. Avoid trailing off at the end.

示例: Not really — my city already has many parks. For example, most neighborhoods have two or three small green spaces where people can relax or exercise.

建议: Give a clear opinion instead of saying you haven’t thought about it. Use correct articles and grammar (e.g. “parks,” “are,” “have”), and provide a specific reason or an example with linking words. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

示例: I haven’t planned any specific park visits, because I find most parks similar; however, I would like to visit a large botanical garden in the future since it would offer more varied plants and peaceful walking paths.

× Yes, of course I love going to the parks.

✓ Yes, of course I loved going to parks.

The question asks about childhood (past), so the verb should be in the past tense. Use 'loved' not 'love', and plural 'parks' without the definite article fits general reference to parks as places visited in childhood.

× When I was a child I often went there with my friend, my parents, my brothers and we used to play there live game and picnic.

✓ When I was a child I often went there with my friends, my parents, and my brothers; we used to play live games and have picnics.

List items should match in number and punctuation. 'My friend' should be 'my friends' if multiple people are implied; add 'and' before final item. 'Live game' is unclear; likely 'live games' or 'play games'. Use plural for repeated activities and 'have picnics' for the activity. Also split with a semicolon or conjunction to avoid a run-on sentence.

× Well, to be honest, I still like going to the park now, but because now I need to study for graduation and that's and I don't have time to go to the park with my parents and my family now.

✓ Well, to be honest, I still like going to the park now, but because I need to study for graduation I don't have time to go with my parents or family.

This sentence is wordy and repetitive ('now' used multiple times). Remove extra 'that's and' which is ungrammatical. Keep present tense for current situation: 'I need' and 'I don't have time'. Use 'or' between parents and family to avoid redundancy.

× Well, actually my city already has many parks. For example, there is several smaller parks nearby, so most neighborhoods have two or three green spaces for relax and.

✓ Well, actually my city already has many parks. For example, there are several smaller parks nearby, so most neighborhoods have two or three green spaces for relaxing and recreation.

Subject-verb agreement: use 'there are' with plural 'parks'. 'For relax and' is ungrammatical; use the gerund 'relaxing' and add a noun like 'recreation' to complete the idea.

× Well that is an interesting question, but I didn't think about the part that I want to go in the future because I think all the park is the same.

✓ Well, that is an interesting question, but I haven't thought about which park I want to go to in the future because I think all parks are the same.

Use present perfect 'haven't thought' to indicate up to now. 'All the park is the same' should be plural: 'all parks are the same.' Also 'which park I want to go to' is clearer than 'the part that I want to go'.

× It have some game for children and also fresh air to relax and picnic.

✓ They have some games for children and also fresh air to relax and have picnics.

The subject should be plural ('they' or 'parks') to match 'parks'. Use 'have' not 'have' with singular 'it'. 'Game' should be plural 'games' and 'picnic' should be 'have picnics' or 'picnicking'.