公园— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Clarify the reason and use correct grammar and natural phrasing. Start with a direct topic sentence, then briefly explain what happened using past tense and linking words. Avoid vague words and fix the collocation “have been trauma”.

示例: No, I didn’t like going to parks when I was a child. When I was five years old I had a frightening experience there, so I felt scared of parks for a long time.

建议: Answer directly and use correct verb forms and articles. Provide a short reason or contrast using a linking word (e.g., because, but, however). Keep within 1–3 sentences and be natural.

示例: No, I still don’t visit parks nowadays because the memory of that childhood incident makes me uncomfortable. However, I sometimes go to quieter green spaces nearby.

建议: Address the question directly (about wanting more parks) rather than repeating dislike. Use a topic sentence that states your position, then explain briefly why, with a linking word and specific detail.

示例: Not really — I don’t want more parks in my area because I’m uncomfortable in them. Instead, I would prefer more small gardens or peaceful walking paths.

建议: Give a concise, coherent reply: start with a clear topic sentence, then offer a specific alternative if applicable. Reduce hesitation words and name places clearly. Use linking words if you add contrast or exception.

示例: No, I don’t plan to visit regular parks in the future. However, I would like to visit an amusement park called Fun Fun Park because I enjoy rides and shows there.

× No, I don't like parks because I have been trauma for five years old.

✓ No, I didn't like parks because I was traumatized when I was five years old.

The original mixes present simple and present perfect incorrectly and uses trauma as a verb/adjective incorrectly. The event is a past experience, so use past tense: 'didn't like' and 'was traumatized'. Also include 'when I was five years old' for correct age expression. Suggestion: Use past tense verbs for past experiences and use 'traumatized' (adjective) or 'had trauma' with appropriate wording. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× No, actually I don't go park.

✓ No, actually I don't go to parks.

This sentence lacks the preposition 'to' and needs plural 'parks' to sound natural when speaking generally. Use present simple negative: 'don't go to parks' for habitual action. Suggestion: Include 'to' after 'go' and use plural when speaking about parks in general. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× No, I don't want uh, anywhere park in the future, but umm, I want to go, umm, what's their name? Umm, fun fun park.

✓ No, I don't want to go to any parks in the future, but I want to go to Fun Fun Park.

Multiple issues: 'anywhere park' is ungrammatical—use 'any parks' and include preposition 'to' after 'go'. Proper nouns for park names are capitalized and usually preceded by 'the' only if part of the name; here 'Fun Fun Park' is treated as a name, so 'to Fun Fun Park' is correct. Also remove filler words. Suggestion: Use 'any' with plural countable nouns for negative statements and include 'to' after 'go'; capitalize proper names. Grammar problem type ID: 11