公园— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Speak with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar and reduce hesitations. Keep answers concise (maximum 5 sentences). Start with a direct statement about your experience, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words (for example, 'because' or 'so'). Avoid repetition and filler words like 'uh'.

示例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they gave me space to play and explore. For example, I used to ride my bicycle and play hide-and-seek with friends, which helped me stay active and make friends. Because of that, I still enjoy outdoor activities today.

建议: Give a clear, grammatical topic sentence and provide specific supporting details with linking words. Correct common errors (e.g., 'parks help you maintain a routine' not 'have used to'). Limit to 2–3 sentences and avoid repeating ideas. Use precise vocabulary like 'exercise', 'fresh air', 'relaxation', 'routine'.

示例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they help me get regular exercise and fresh air. For instance, I go jogging there three times a week, which helps me keep a healthy routine and feel more motivated.

建议: Respond directly and organize reasons logically with linking words like 'because' and 'for example'. Avoid fillers and correct grammar (e.g., 'there is only one park' → fine; 'children lose interest' instead of 'show less interest'). Give a specific suggestion or example of what you want (e.g., playgrounds, sports facilities).

示例: Yes, I would like more parks because our city only has one small park. For example, adding several parks with playgrounds and sports courts would give children more places to play and encourage families to spend time outdoors.

建议: Answer with a clear topic sentence and give specific details about the park and why you want to visit. Use comparative language correctly ('more inspiring than other parks') and avoid vague phrases like 'various things' or 'motivation'. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

示例: Yes, I would love to visit the amusement parks in Singapore, especially Universal Studios. It has many exciting rides and themed areas, which I think would be more exciting and inspiring than the parks I have visited before.

× Yes, I like to going park as a child because it is very important to go park as a child.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks as a child because it is very important for children to go to parks.

Errors: incorrect verb form ('to going' should be 'going' or 'to go'), missing prepositions and plural nouns ('park' should be 'parks'), and tense consistency (question asked about childhood so use past tense 'liked'). Suggestion: use 'liked going to parks' or 'liked to go to parks', include 'to' before 'parks' and use plural when speaking generally about parks.' ,

× If, uh, during these days, children only play games in mobile phones.

✓ These days, many children only play games on mobile phones.

Errors: unnecessary filler 'If, uh', incorrect preposition ('in mobile phones' should be 'on mobile phones'), and awkward structure. Suggestion: remove fillers, use 'these days' at start, and use 'on' for devices.' ,

× So I like to, uh, give some advice to children to go parks that helps you in various, uh, lifestyle and also help you in.

✓ So I like to give some advice to children to go to parks because that helps them in various aspects of life.

Errors: unnecessary filler, missing prepositions ('to go parks' -> 'to go to parks'), incorrect pronoun agreement ('you' should be 'them' when referring to children), incomplete sentence ending. Suggestion: complete the idea and use 'helps them in various aspects of life.' ,

× Yes, I am still going to parks now because parks also have used to maintain your timetable in proper way and it also helps you to to give some natural oxygen in nature and also you play some games in parks that helps you in motivation.

✓ Yes, I still go to parks now because parks help you maintain a regular timetable, give fresh air, and allow you to play games that boost motivation.

Errors: incorrect continuous form ('I am still going' is awkward; 'I still go' is better), wrong phrase 'have used to maintain' should be 'help you maintain', duplicate 'to', awkward 'give some natural oxygen in nature' should be 'give fresh air', subject-verb agreement ('games ... that helps' -> 'that boost') and inconsistent pronouns. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual actions and correct verbs and collocations.

× Yes, I like to see more parks in my city because, uh, there is only one park in my city and uh, due to only, uh, one park, uh, children show less interest in parks and there is no some uh, games also in parks.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because there is only one park now, so children show less interest, and there are not many play facilities in the park.

Errors: tense/modal phrasing ('I like to see' -> 'I would like to see'), redundant fillers, singular/plural mismatch ('there is no some games' incorrect), and awkward phrasing. Suggestion: use 'there are not many play facilities' or 'there are few games' and 'would like' to express preference politely.

× Government allows some various uh, big parks that allow children to play.

✓ The government should build several large parks that allow children to play.

Errors: word choice and modal meaning ('allows' is odd here), article omission ('Government' -> 'The government'), and word order. Suggestion: use 'should build' to express recommendation and 'several large parks' for clarity.

× Yes, there are many parks I want to go in future, but my most favorable park is in Singapore.

✓ Yes, there are many parks I want to visit in the future, but my favorite park is in Singapore.

Errors: missing infinitive 'visit' after 'want to', missing article 'the' before 'future', and word choice 'most favorable' -> 'favorite'. Suggestion: use 'visit in the future' and 'my favorite park'.

× That name is amusement park.

✓ Its name is 'Amusement Park'.

Errors: incorrect phrase 'That name is' and missing possessive pronoun 'Its'. Suggestion: say 'Its name is Amusement Park' or 'It is called Amusement Park'.

× There are various things to explore in that park and it also gives you a great amount of motivation than other parts.

✓ There are many things to explore in that park, and it gives you more motivation than other parks.

Errors: awkward quantifier 'great amount of motivation', incorrect comparative structure ('gives you a great amount of motivation than' -> 'gives you more motivation than'), and 'other parts' unclear; use 'other parks'. Suggestion: use 'more motivation than other parks' and 'many things to explore.'