视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is clear, relevant, and well supported with a reason and an example. However, the second sentence is grammatically incomplete because it begins with “when” and has no main clause. Combine the ideas into a complete sentence, and avoid repeating “photos” and “memories.” You could also add a more specific detail about what kind of scenery or local life you photograph.

示例: Yes, I really enjoy taking pictures of different views because they help me remember special moments from my travels. For instance, when I visit another country, I like photographing the scenery and everyday local life, such as markets or street performances. Later, I can look back at the pictures and share those memories with my friends.

建议: You answer the question directly and provide a relevant personal example. However, “when I visited Riverside Village in Thailand” is a sentence fragment and should be connected to the following sentence. Also, “views of rural areas” could be expressed more naturally as “rural scenery,” and you could explain more specifically which traditional features you observed.

示例: I prefer rural scenery because it often preserves local traditions, and the people tend to be very friendly. For example, when I visited Riverside Village in Thailand, I took a boat trip along a canal and watched people go about their daily lives. I especially enjoyed seeing the traditional houses and learning how the local community lived.

建议: Your main idea is understandable, but there are several word-choice and grammar problems. Use “views” instead of “wheels,” and check the place names, such as “Koh Samui” and possibly “Koh Chang.” Say “southern Thailand,” not “southern off Thailand,” and replace “beaches and oceans” with “beaches and the sea.” Avoid vague phrases such as “you can enjoy it every time you go” and the conversational filler “you know”; instead, give one specific reason or example.

示例: I prefer the views in my own country because Thailand has many beautiful destinations, including Koh Samui and the islands in the south. For example, southern Thailand has clear water, white-sand beaches, and impressive limestone cliffs. I enjoy visiting these places because they are relaxing, and I can experience the beauty of my own country.

× For example, when I travel to other countries and take photos of the scenery and local life so I can keep them and share those memories.

✓ For example, when I travel to other countries, I take photos of the scenery and local life so I can keep them and share those memories.

The original sentence begins with a when-clause but does not contain a complete main clause. Add the subject I and the verb take after the introductory when-clause to form a complete sentence. Remember that a dependent clause beginning with when must be followed by an independent clause.

× For example, when I visited Riverside Village in Thailand. I enjoyed a boat trip along the canal and watching daily village life.

✓ For example, when I visited Riverside Village in Thailand, I enjoyed a boat trip along the canal and watched daily village life.

The original sentence incorrectly separates the when-clause from its main clause with a full stop. Use a comma because the when-clause is an introductory dependent clause. The verbs enjoyed and watched are also placed in a parallel structure.

× For example, when you go to southern off Thailand, you can see many beaches and oceans and you can enjoy it every time you go, you know?

✓ For example, when you go to the south of Thailand, you can see many beaches and oceans and enjoy it every time you go, you know?

The preposition off is incorrect in this expression. Use the south of Thailand or southern Thailand. The phrase go to the south of Thailand correctly expresses movement toward a region. The repeated subject you is not necessary in the second coordinated clause.