视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 質問には直接「Yes, I do.」と答え、その後に理由と具体例を加えましょう。「take in pictures」は「take pictures」、「the good memory」は「good memories」、「author picture」は文脈に合わないため「photos of beautiful views」などが自然です。また、「the baby through sight」は意味が不明確なので削除し、最大3文程度で明確にまとめてください。

示例: Yes, I do. I enjoy taking pictures of beautiful views because they become wonderful memories. I especially like photographing sunsets and taking pictures of places I visit with my family.

建议: 「the build」は「views」または「urban views」に、「auto buildings」はおそらく「tall or modern buildings」に直しましょう。「the landscape ... are」は主語に合わせて「the landscape ... is」とします。同じ「urban areas」の繰り返しを避け、「because」で理由を明確につなぎ、都市の景観の具体例を1つ加えると、より自然で効果的です。

示例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy looking at modern buildings and busy streets. The contrast between tall skyscrapers and green parks is especially attractive to me. I often take pictures from a park where I can see the city skyline.

建议: 「I born I was born」は「I was born」に修正し、「I prefer the...」の重複を避けてください。質問への直接的な答えの後、「because I am familiar with the places」など、母国の景色を好む具体的な理由を述べるとよいです。「when I was in my own country」は現在の好みなので「when I am in my own country」が適切です。

示例: I prefer the views in my own country because I was born and raised there. I feel relaxed when I see familiar mountains, beaches, and streets. Although I would like to visit other countries, the scenery at home feels more comfortable and meaningful to me.

× Yes, I like to take in pictures because the pictures will become the good memory.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures because the pictures will become good memories.

The plural subject 'pictures' refers to more than one memory, so 'memory' should be plural: 'memories.' The expression 'the good memory' is also not appropriate here because the speaker is referring to memories in general.

× Yes, I like to take in pictures because the pictures will become the good memory.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures because the pictures will become good memories.

The article 'the' is unnecessary before 'good memories' because the speaker is discussing memories generally, not one specific memory.

× Yes, I like to take in pictures because the pictures will become the good memory.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures because the pictures will become good memories.

The usual expression is 'take pictures,' not 'take in pictures.' 'Take in' has a different meaning, such as observing or understanding something.

× So I want to take author picture of the baby through sight a bit beautiful views.

✓ So I want to take another picture of the baby and capture some beautiful views.

The preposition 'through' does not fit this meaning. Use 'of' after 'picture' to identify the subject, and use 'capture' or 'take pictures of' for views.

× I prefer the build in urban areas because there are auto buildings in urban areas and the landscape of the outer buildings are very beautiful.

✓ I prefer buildings in urban areas because there are tall buildings in urban areas, and the landscape around the buildings is very beautiful.

The general preference is for more than one building, so 'build' should be 'buildings.' Use plural nouns when talking about buildings in general.

× I prefer the build in urban areas because there are auto buildings in urban areas and the landscape of the outer buildings are very beautiful.

✓ I prefer buildings in urban areas because there are tall buildings in urban areas, and the landscape around the buildings is very beautiful.

The subject of the second clause is the singular noun 'landscape,' not the plural noun 'buildings.' Therefore, the verb must be 'is,' not 'are.'

× I prefer the views in my own country because I born I was born in this country and so I prefer the I feel relaxed when I was in my own country.

✓ I prefer the views in my own country because I was born in this country, and I feel relaxed when I am there.

The passive expression for birth is 'was born,' which uses the past tense of 'be' plus the past participle 'born.' The phrase 'I born' is incomplete and incorrect.

× I prefer the views in my own country because I born I was born in this country and so I prefer the I feel relaxed when I was in my own country.

✓ I prefer the views in my own country because I was born in this country, and I feel relaxed when I am there.

The speaker is describing a general feeling that is true now, so use the present tense 'I feel' and 'I am,' not the past form 'I was.'

× I prefer the views in my own country because I born I was born in this country and so I prefer the I feel relaxed when I was in my own country.

✓ I prefer the views in my own country because I was born in this country, and I feel relaxed when I am there.

The original sentence contains repeated and incomplete phrases, such as 'I born I was born' and 'I prefer the I feel.' Remove the repetitions and connect the ideas with a clear sentence structure.