视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and avoid fillers (e.g., "umm"). Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one specific reason with a short example. Use linking words (because, so) to connect ideas and keep answers within 3–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views because photos help me preserve memories. For example, I often photograph city sunsets so I can relive evenings spent with friends. I also enjoy sharing a few of my best shots on social media to get feedback and keep in touch.

建议: Begin with a clear preference statement, then give 1–2 specific reasons using linking words (for example, because, and). Avoid repeating simple phrases and use varied vocabulary (e.g., skyline, architecture, street life). Keep it within 3 sentences.

示例: I prefer urban views because the city combines striking architecture and lively street scenes. For example, I enjoy photographing modern skylines and busy markets, which create dynamic compositions. The mix of buildings and parks gives me more interesting subjects to capture.

建议: Make a clear, single preference and support it with specific comparisons. Avoid vague or slangy phrases (e.g., "hits different"). Use linking words (however, because) and provide concise examples. Keep to 2–3 sentences and correct small grammar issues.

示例: I prefer views in other countries because they often offer different architecture and landscapes that I haven't seen at home. For instance, I enjoy photographing foreign skylines and unique coastal sunsets, which contrast with the familiar scenes in my country.

× It helps me remember those, umm those memories for a longer time and it helps me and others to have fun and remember things we used to do.

✓ It helps me remember those memories for a longer time, and it helps others and me have fun and remember things we used to do.

This sentence has slightly awkward pronoun order and redundant words. 'Those, umm those memories' is repetitive; remove the duplicate demonstrative. Pronoun order in coordinated objects should place 'others' before 'me' (politeness convention) but either order is grammatical; reordering improves naturalness. Also insert a comma before 'and' to join two independent clauses. Suggestion: remove filler words, avoid repetition, and use clear comma placement. Grammar problem type ID:12 and 26

× I like views in urban areas and that is because urban areas usually have a lot going on in the city.

✓ I like views in urban areas, and that is because urban areas usually have a lot going on.

'a lot going on in the city' is redundant when you already mentioned urban areas; trimming improves clarity. Add a comma before 'and' to link clauses. Subject-verb agreement is fine, but the sentence structure is wordy; simplify to avoid repetition. Grammar problem type ID:27 and 26

× It has buildings, it has stores and nature, it has everything all combined together to have the perfect view.

✓ They have buildings, stores, and nature all combined to create the perfect view.

Using 'it' to refer back to 'urban areas' is less natural than plural 'they' because 'urban areas' is plural (singular 'it' causes disagreement in reference). Also the phrase 'everything all combined together to have' is wordy and uses unnecessary words; replace with 'all combined to create'. Ensure pronoun agrees with plural antecedent and remove redundancy. Grammar problem type ID:1 and 27

× But those in other countries are exquisite and there is Skylines, Horizons and. Sunsets, beautiful sunsets, bustling streets, and even their nature hits different.

✓ But those in other countries are exquisite: skylines, horizons, sunsets, bustling streets, and even their nature feel different.

Original contains capitalization errors ('Skylines, Horizons and. Sunsets' incorrectly capitalized and punctuated) and a sentence fragment from the misplaced period. Use a colon to introduce the list. 'There is skylines' is ungrammatical because 'there is' requires a singular; use the plural list directly. Replace 'hits different' with 'feel different' to match plural subject 'their nature' or better 'the scenery feels different'. Remove unnecessary capitalization and fix punctuation. Grammar problem type ID:22 and 26