视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make the answer more concise and natural by starting with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific reason and an example. Avoid repeating similar ideas (keep memories / look back). Use a linking word to connect the reason and the example.

示例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views because it helps me preserve memories of places I’ve been. For example, I often take photos of coastal sunsets so I can remember the colors and atmosphere and decide whether to revisit those spots later.

建议: Begin with a direct statement of preference, avoid fillers (uh, like), and choose precise adjectives—‘confronting’ is unclear here. Use one or two clear reasons with a linking word and a brief example to support your choice.

示例: I prefer rural views because they are quieter and more relaxing, with open landscapes and fresh air. For instance, walking in the countryside helps me unwind after a busy week, unlike noisy city streets.

建议: Give a clear, concise preference first, then briefly explain with specific reasons. Avoid repetition and tentative language such as ‘maybe’ twice; be more confident. Add one concrete example of a foreign view you liked to make the answer specific.

示例: At the moment I prefer views in other countries because I’ve seen more variety abroad than in my own city. For example, I loved the mountain scenery I saw on a trip to Switzerland, which felt very different from the urban landscape at home.

× I do like taking pictures of different views because I like to keep memories and then look back at those pictures and maybe visit the areas again.

✓ I do like taking pictures of different views because I like keeping memories and then looking back at those pictures and maybe visiting the areas again.

The original mixes infinitive forms ('to keep', 'to look', 'to visit') with 'like' + -ing structure ('taking'). For consistency and naturalness, after 'like' use the gerund form (verb + -ing) for subsequent verbs when referring to general habits: 'like keeping', 'looking back', 'visiting'. This improves parallel structure and fluency. Suggestion: Use consistent gerund forms after 'like' when describing habitual actions.

× Uh, from my point of view, I believe that views in rural areas are more comforting, confronting and more quiet and just like, better.

✓ Uh, from my point of view, I believe that views in rural areas are more comforting, less hectic, quieter and generally better.

Problems: 'confronting' is awkward in this context; 'more quiet' is nonstandard comparative (use 'quieter'); the list mixes comparatives ('more comforting') and plain adjectives. Revised sentence uses appropriate comparative forms ('quieter') and a clearer word ('less hectic') instead of 'confronting'. Also remove filler 'just like' for clarity. Suggestion: Use standard comparative forms (add -er or 'more') and choose adjectives that fit the meaning.

× I mostly prefer views in other countries because I have not been to more beautiful places other than my city.

✓ I mostly prefer views in other countries because I have not been to places more beautiful than those in my city.

The original phrase 'been to more beautiful places other than my city' is awkward and ungrammatical. Correct structure is 'places more beautiful than those in my city' or 'places more beautiful than my city'. This fixes comparison object placement and makes the sentence clear. Suggestion: Place the comparative phrase ('more beautiful than...') next to the noun it modifies and use a clear comparison object ('those in my city').

× So maybe if I actually got to know my country and see the views more frequently than I actually do, maybe I would prefer views in my own country but right now in other countries.

✓ So maybe if I actually got to know my country and saw the views more frequently than I do now, I would prefer views in my own country, but right now I prefer those in other countries.

Issues: tense inconsistency and awkward phrasing. The conditional requires past tense in the if-clause ('got' or better 'got to know' -> 'got to know' is OK) and 'would prefer' in the main clause; 'see' should be 'saw' for the hypothetical. Also clarify 'right now in other countries' to 'right now I prefer those in other countries.' Suggestion: Use the second conditional for hypothetical situations ('If I got..., I would...') and keep tense consistent; make the current preference explicit.