视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cải thiện ngữ pháp căn bản, phát âm và sửa lỗi từ vựng; sắp xếp ý rõ ràng hơn bằng câu chủ đề và 1–2 câu bổ trợ; tránh lặp từ và tiếng ồn (um/uh). Cụ thể: (1) Sử dụng thì và danh từ đúng (e.g., “I love taking photos of landscapes”); (2) sửa lỗi collocation (“in the background”, “when I take a picture”); (3) rút gọn cụm từ không cần thiết và tránh lặp âm tiết; (4) phát âm rõ từ khó như “landscape” và “background”.

示例: Yes, I love taking photos of landscapes. For example, I often photograph beaches with mountains in the background because the contrast of sea and peaks makes me feel relaxed and happy.

建议: Cải thiện cách dùng từ (prefer, countryside, rural), ngữ pháp số ít/những (beach/beaches), giảm tiếng ồm (uh) và dùng từ liên kết để diễn đạt lý do rõ ràng. Cụ thể: (1) Dùng “prefer” + noun/verb-ing correctly: “I prefer rural areas to urban areas”; (2) chú ý số nhiều/ít và mạo từ; (3) thêm linking phrase như “because” hoặc “as” để nối ý; (4) viết 1 chủ đề + 1–2 câu giải thích chi tiết.

示例: To be honest, I prefer rural areas to urban ones because there are many beautiful beaches and mountains there, which make it easier for me to take interesting photos.

建议: Cải thiện thì (have/has), động từ chính (prefer), và cấu trúc câu phức: nói trực tiếp (topic sentence), rồi giải thích ngắn gọn; tránh lặp “uh” và sửa collocation (“famous destinations”, “many landscapes” và “enjoy the view”). Cụ thể: (1) Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng: “I prefer views in my country”; (2) cung cấp 1–2 lý do cụ thể; (3) dùng linking words như “however” để đưa ý trái chiều về du lịch nước ngoài.

示例: I prefer views in my own country because Vietnam has many famous destinations and diverse landscapes that I can easily visit. However, when I get the chance I would like to travel abroad to see different scenery as well.

× This definitely, I love taking photo of landscape.

✓ This is definitely true; I love taking photos of landscapes.

The sentence is missing a verb and articles/plural forms. Use 'This is definitely true' to link the adverb 'definitely' properly (adverb cannot stand alone). 'Photo' should be plural 'photos' when speaking generally, and 'landscape' should be plural 'landscapes' or preceded by an article. Also add 'is' to form a complete clause and use correct word order. Suggestion: say 'This is definitely true; I love taking photos of landscapes.'

× For example, I often capture a beautiful beach and mountains in a background and when I take up, when I take a pill a picture, I really feel happy and with love.

✓ For example, I often capture a beautiful beach and mountains in the background, and when I take a picture, I really feel happy and full of love.

'In a background' is incorrect — use 'in the background'. Irrelevant words 'take up' and 'take a pill a picture' appear and should be removed. 'Take a picture' is the correct phrase. 'With love' is awkward here; use 'full of love' or 'loving' to express emotion. Suggestion: simplify and correct phrase order: 'I often capture a beautiful beach and mountains in the background, and when I take a picture, I really feel happy and full of love.'

× To be honest, I really refer views in other countryside.

✓ To be honest, I really prefer views in the countryside.

'Refer' is the wrong verb; 'prefer' is intended. 'Other countryside' is ungrammatical; use 'the countryside' for rural areas generally. Also use 'views' is fine. Suggestion: 'To be honest, I really prefer views in the countryside.'

× This is because in a in a rural areas, uh, there are, there are many beautiful beach and the mountains, so it's easy for me to take photos.

✓ This is because in rural areas there are many beautiful beaches and mountains, so it's easy for me to take photos.

Remove duplicate 'a in a'. Use plural 'rural areas' without 'a'. 'Many beautiful beach' should be plural 'many beautiful beaches'. 'The mountains' can be 'mountains' in general. Also omit unnecessary filler words. Suggestion: 'in rural areas there are many beautiful beaches and mountains.'

× I think I referred views in my country, uh, this is because Vietnam have many, uh, famous destination, uh, moreover, there are also have many landscape, so it's easy for me to, uh, look at and, umm, enjoy the view, but when I have, uh. Opportunities I want to go to the other countries to, uh, watch some, uh, to enjoy the view.

✓ I think I prefer views in my country. This is because Vietnam has many famous destinations and many landscapes, so it's easy for me to look at and enjoy the view. But when I have the opportunity, I want to go to other countries to enjoy their views.

'Referred' is incorrect; use 'prefer'. 'Vietnam have' should be 'Vietnam has' (subject-verb agreement). 'Famous destination' should be plural 'famous destinations'. 'There are also have many landscape' mixes structures; use 'there are also many landscapes'. 'When I have, uh. Opportunities' should be 'when I have the opportunity' (singular) or 'opportunities' without a stray period. 'Go to the other countries' is unnatural; use 'go to other countries'. 'Watch some' is vague; use 'enjoy their views.' Suggestion: simplify sentences, fix verb forms and agreement as in the correction.