视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: ปรับคำศัพท์และความถูกต้องของประโยค รวมถึงความชัดเจนของคำที่ต้องการสื่อ (เช่น 'views' ไม่ใช่ 'wheels') และหลีกเลี่ยงการซ้ำคำ ใช้ประโยคหัวข้อแล้วตามด้วยรายละเอียดสั้นๆ และเชื่อมด้วยคำเชื่อมง่ายๆ เช่น 'because' หรือ 'so'. ฝึกออกเสียงคำสำคัญและจัดลำดับคำให้ถูกต้อง เช่น 'It brings back memories' แทน 'it memory it have memory'.

示例: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing different views because they remind me of places I have visited. For example, I often take pictures of landscapes and cityscapes and keep them on my phone as memories.

建议: แก้คำศัพท์และโครงสร้างประโยคให้ชัดเจน ระบุเหตุผลเฉพาะเจาะจง ใช้ linking words เช่น 'because' และลดการพูดซ้ำ ฝึกเรียงคำและใช้รูปพหูพจน์/เอกพจน์ให้ถูกต้อง (e.g. 'rural areas have fewer buildings').

示例: I prefer views in rural areas because they are quieter and more natural. For instance, I like wide fields and old trees that you rarely see in cities, so the scenery feels more peaceful.

建议: ปรับคำศัพท์และความชัดเจนของความคิด ตอบตรงคำถามและให้เหตุผลที่ชัดเจน ใช้ประโยคเชื่อมเช่น 'because' และให้ตัวอย่างประกอบเพื่อเพิ่มความเฉพาะเจาะจง หลีกเลี่ยงการใช้คำซ้ำและไวยากรณ์ผิด (เช่น 'I see my own country every day').

示例: I prefer the views in my own country because they feel familiar and comfortable. For example, I enjoy local parks and streets I know well, so I don't feel anxious when I take photos there.

× Yes I do. I like taking pictures of different wheels. I like to take a picture the of the beautiful wheels wheels and it memory it have memory in my phone.

✓ Yes, I do. I like taking pictures of different views. I like to take pictures of the beautiful views; they are memories stored on my phone.

The student used 'wheels' instead of the adjective/noun 'views'—this is a lexical choice error treated as incorrect adjective/noun use. Repeated words 'wheels wheels' and wrong word order 'a picture the of' are incorrect. Also 'it memory it have memory' is ungrammatical. Suggestion: use 'views' not 'wheels', plural 'pictures' to match 'taking pictures', correct article order 'pictures of the beautiful views', and express memory as a plural concept: 'they are memories stored on my phone.' Use commas and a semicolon to separate clauses for clarity.

× I prefer wheels in rural area because it because in rural areas there has they have there have many of umm it don't have many of building like urban.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because in rural areas there are not many buildings like in urban areas.

Errors include wrong preposition and article use ('in rural area' should be 'in rural areas'), incorrect existential construction ('there has/they have/there have' should be 'there are'), and incorrect negation 'it don't have many of building' should be 'there are not many buildings'. Suggestion: use 'there are' for existence, plural 'areas' and 'buildings', and include 'in' for comparison with urban areas ('like in urban areas').

× I prefer wheels in my own country because. I see my own country will every every day and I like it. I never worrying about it.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because I see my country every day and I like it. I never worry about it.

Pronoun and verb form errors: 'I see my own country will every every day' is incorrect—'will' is unnecessary and repetition 'every every' is an error. 'I never worrying' uses the wrong verb form; it should be simple present 'I never worry'. Suggestion: remove 'will', use 'see my country every day', and use base verb 'worry' with 'never' to state a habitual fact.