视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 답변이 의도는 전달되지만 문장이 연결되지 않고 문법·어휘 오류가 있습니다. 먼저 명확한 주제문으로 시작하고, 연결어를 사용하여 이유와 방법을 덧붙이세요. 예: 주어-동사 일치를 지키고, 관사(a/the)을 정확히 사용하며, 축약이나 불필요한 준언급(uh 등)을 줄이세요. 또한 ‘SNS’, ‘tag’, ‘send to friends’ 같은 표현을 자연스러운 형태로 고치면 좋습니다. 구체적으로는 다음을 연습하세요: 1) 간결한 주제문(1문장), 2) 이유(1문장), 3) 예시나 방법(1문장) — 전체 3문장 이내로 구성하기.

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I often take photos to share on social media because I like showing my friends interesting places. For example, I usually tag two or three friends when I post a photo on Instagram.

建议: 의견은 분명하지만 문법과 표현이 어색합니다. 'want to prefer' 대신 간단히 'prefer'를 사용하고, 이유를 더 구체적으로 설명하세요. 연결어(because, so, and) 뒤에는 완전한 문장을 쓰고 명사구도 정확하게 표현하세요. 예를 들어 'apartment views' 또는 'city skyline' 같은 구체적 표현을 사용하고, 한두 개의 이유를 덧붙여 문장을 2~3문장으로 구성하세요.

示例: I prefer views in urban areas because I enjoy city skylines and modern apartment buildings. Also, cities have interesting architecture and lively streets, so I find them more exciting to photograph.

建议: 답변의 논리와 어휘 선택이 혼란스럽습니다. 'a very good countries'는 문법 오류이고 'like Futsal'은 문맥상 맞지 않습니다. 먼저 명확히 'I prefer views in other countries'라고 말하고, 이유로 문화적 다양성이나 건축적 차이 등 구체적 근거를 제시하세요. 예시로 특정 나라의 특징을 설명할 때는 관련된 관광지나 풍경을 언급하고, 불필요한 단어는 제거하세요.

示例: I prefer views in other countries because traveling lets me see different cultures and landscapes. For example, I would love to photograph Japan’s temples and cherry blossoms, which are very different from sights in my country.

× Yes, because uh, I will. I would like to take a pictures and send. Two friends or tag. The SNS.

✓ Yes. I would like to take pictures and send them to two friends or tag them on social media.

The sentence contains unnecessary modal 'will' and inconsistent modals. Use 'would like' to express preference. 'a pictures' is wrong: 'pictures' is plural so no 'a'. Include object 'them' for 'send' and 'tag'. 'The SNS' is unnatural; use 'social media'. Combine fragments into one coherent sentence. Suggested improvement: Remove 'will', use 'I would like to take pictures and send them to two friends or tag them on social media.' Use plural nouns correctly and include direct objects.

× I want to prefer views in urban areas because I like apartments view and.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because I like apartment views.

'Want to prefer' is awkward — use 'prefer' to state preference. 'apartments view' has incorrect noun form and missing plural agreement; use 'apartment views'. Trailing 'and' is incomplete. Keep sentence concise. Suggested improvement: Say 'I prefer views in urban areas because I like apartment views.'

× I would prefer views in another country because for example Japan is a very good countries like Futsal.

✓ I would prefer views in another country because, for example, Japan is a very good country for futsal.

'a very good countries' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'country'. 'like Futsal' is incorrect: use preposition 'for' to indicate suitability and lowercase 'futsal' unless proper noun. Include commas around 'for example'. Suggested improvement: 'I would prefer views in another country because, for example, Japan is a very good country for futsal.'