视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be clearer and more grammatical: start with a direct topic sentence, avoid repetition, use correct vocabulary (weather, waves) and reduce filler phrases. Add one or two specific details with a linking word to make your answer coherent. Keep it under five sentences.

示例: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views. I especially enjoy photographing weather scenes and ocean waves, because the light and motion create dramatic images. For example, I often capture sunset waves at the beach, which makes me feel calm and proud of the photos I take.

建议: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, and avoid vague references. Use linking words to explain reasons and give a specific example. Replace unclear words like "weaves" with "views" or a precise feature.

示例: I prefer views in urban areas. Urban scenes appeal to me because I grew up visiting cities, so the architecture and busy streets feel familiar and meaningful. For instance, I enjoy photographing city skylines and street markets that remind me of childhood trips.

建议: Give a clear statement then support it with specific reasons and one example. Fix grammar (I lived and grew up here; those views) and avoid unclear phrases like "cities wheels." Use linking words such as 'because' and 'for example' to structure your answer.

示例: I prefer views in my own country because I grew up here and those places have a personal meaning for me. For example, I love photographing familiar city streets and parks that remind me of family outings, which makes the photos more special.

× Yes, I love I'm a really big fan of weathers and so like waves, I really love taking pictures.

✓ Yes, I love it. I'm a really big fan of weather and I like waves; I really love taking pictures.

This sentence contains multiple issues: run-on structure and incorrect noun form 'weathers'. Use 'weather' as an uncountable noun. Separate ideas with proper punctuation and conjunctions (use 'it' after 'I love' to complete the clause). Use 'I like waves' rather than 'and so like waves'. Improve flow by splitting into clauses and adding conjunctions. Suggestion: Break long spoken fragments into clear clauses and use uncountable noun forms.'

× So when that two things that I love mix, I really feel happy.

✓ So when those two things I love mix, I really feel happy.

Original has redundant 'that' and incorrect demonstrative 'that two things'. Use 'those' to refer to two items and omit the extra 'that' before 'I love'. Keep the relative clause concise. Suggestion: Use 'those two things I love' or 'the two things I love'.'

× I can say in urban areas 'cause that fits me well.

✓ I would say urban areas because that fits me well.

Use 'would say' or 'I prefer' rather than 'I can say' for preference statements. Also 'in urban areas' can be stated without 'in' after 'say' — better: 'I would say urban areas'. Replace informal ''cause' with 'because'. Suggestion: Use modal 'would' to express preference and standard conjunctions.'

× I really loved when as a child visiting urban areas.

✓ I really loved visiting urban areas when I was a child.

Original word order is incorrect. Use past simple 'loved' with a proper time clause 'when I was a child' and the gerund 'visiting' follows 'loved'. The phrase 'when as a child visiting' is ungrammatical. Suggestion: Place the time expression 'when I was a child' after or before the main clause properly.'

× So that has a really deep meaning for me.

✓ So that has a really deep meaning for me.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable; no correction needed. It correctly uses 'deep' as an adjective modifying 'meaning'. Suggestion: Keep as is.'

× I prefer weaves in urban areas.

✓ I prefer waves in urban areas.

The student wrote 'weaves' which is a misspelling of 'waves'. This is a lexical error relating to singular/plural form and spelling. Replace with the correct plural noun 'waves'. Suggestion: Practice pronunciation and spelling of similar-sounding words.'

× I can say my own country 'cause I lived and grow here, so I'm used to that views and it has a deep meaning for me.

✓ I would say my own country because I live and grew up here, so I'm used to the views and it has a deep meaning for me.

Multiple issues: 'can say' should be 'would say' for preferences; tense mismatch 'lived and grow' should be 'lived and grew up' or 'live and grew up' depending on intended meaning. If the student still lives there, use 'I live and grew up here' or better 'I grew up here and still live here.' Use 'the views' definite article for specific views. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent and use 'would' for polite preference statements.'

× Because of that, I'm gonna choose my cities wheels.

✓ Because of that, I'm going to choose my city's views.

'I'm gonna' is informal; use 'I'm going to'. 'cities wheels' is ungrammatical and unclear—likely meant 'city's views' (possessive) or 'cities' views' (views of my cities). Choose singular possessive 'my city's views' if referring to one city, or 'my cities' views' for multiple. Also replace 'wheels' (wrong word) with 'views'. Suggestion: Use correct possessive form and formal future 'going to'.'