视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make your answer more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, give one or two specific reasons with linking words, avoid filler words and sentence fragments, and correct common errors (plural forms, articles, and word choice). Try to keep to 2–4 sentences. For example, say you enjoy the hobby, explain a specific reason (e.g., capturing light or mood), and mention frequency briefly.

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I especially like photographing landscapes because I enjoy capturing changing light and atmosphere, and I often go out to shoot on weekends when I have free time.

建议: Organize your response: give a direct preference first, then support it with clear reasons using linking words. Fix grammar (subject-verb agreement, articles) and avoid hesitation. Use specific details (what is unique about rural views) and keep it to 2–3 sentences.

示例: I prefer rural areas to urban ones because they are quieter and offer more natural subjects. For example, I can photograph fields, wildlife and unobstructed horizons, which creates more interesting compositions for my natural life photography.

建议: Answer directly and give a clear reason with a specific example. Correct grammar (singular/plural, articles) and improve coherence by using linking words like 'because' or 'for example'. Mention one concrete advantage of photographing views abroad (new cultures, different architecture, varied landscapes). Keep it succinct (2–3 sentences).

示例: I prefer taking photos in other countries because traveling exposes me to different cultures and landscapes. For instance, since studying in Adelaide I have discovered coastal scenes and architectural styles that I don't see in my home country, which inspires my photography.

× I like taking pictures of different view.

✓ I like taking pictures of different views.

The noun 'view' should be plural because 'different' indicates more than one; use 'views' to match plural meaning. Suggestion: use plural nouns after words like 'different,' 'many,' or 'several.'

× This is due to several reasons including.

✓ This is due to several reasons, including the following:

The original sentence is incomplete and ends with a dangling 'including.' Complete the structure by adding what follows 'including' or rephrasing. Suggestion: follow 'including' with a list or phrase, and use a comma before it.

× It is one of my hobby that every now and then I'll go out and take pictures of different sceneries.

✓ It is one of my hobbies that, every now and then, I go out and take pictures of different scenes.

'Hobby' needs plural 'hobbies' after 'one of my.' 'Every now and then' should be set off by commas. 'I'll go out' is acceptable but present simple 'I go out' fits habitual action better. 'Sceneries' is uncountable or uncommon; use 'scenes' or 'landscapes.' Suggestion: use 'one of my hobbies' and prefer 'scenes' for plural countable noun.

× However this is only done whenever I'm free though so they're except.

✓ However, I only do this when I'm free, so there are some exceptions.

Original sentence is unclear and contains wrong pronoun 'they're except.' Recast to active voice 'I only do this when I'm free' and clarify exceptions with 'there are some exceptions.' Use commas to separate clauses. Suggestion: express the subject explicitly and use correct phrase 'there are exceptions.'

× If I'm being honest, it's actually depends on how crowd the urban areas are because the rural area it's more quiet compared to the urban areas.

✓ If I'm being honest, it actually depends on how crowded the urban areas are, because rural areas are quieter compared to urban areas.

Use 'depends' without contraction 'it's' before it: 'it depends.' 'Crowd' should be adjective 'crowded.' Avoid repeating articles; use plural 'rural areas' to match comparison and 'quieter' is comparative form of 'quiet.' Suggestion: use 'crowded' and comparative 'quieter.'

× So umm. As someone who enjoys natural life photography, personally I'll say I'll prefer rural area because it is something unique.

✓ So, as someone who enjoys nature photography, I personally prefer rural areas because they offer something unique.

'Natural life photography' is awkward; 'nature photography' is standard. 'I'll say I'll prefer' is redundant; use 'I personally prefer.' 'Rural area' should be plural 'rural areas' or 'the rural area.' Use plural subject 'they' or 'rural areas' and 'offer' to match plural. Suggestion: simplify to 'I personally prefer rural areas because they offer something unique.'

× Well, if I have to really choose between my own views in my own countries and other country, I'll probably say other country just because right now I also experience this every day.

✓ Well, if I really had to choose between views in my own country and those in other countries, I'd probably choose other countries, because I experience this variety every day.

Use 'if I really had to choose' for hypothetical; 'my own countries' is incorrect if speaker means one country—use 'my own country.' Make comparison parallel: 'views in my own country' vs 'those in other countries.' Use conditional 'I'd' (would) and 'choose.' 'Experience this every day' is clearer as 'experience this variety every day.' Suggestion: make comparisons parallel and use correct conditional tense.

× I am an international student here in Adelaide and going to different places allow me to see different opportunities.

✓ I am an international student here in Adelaide, and going to different places allows me to see different opportunities.

The subject 'going to different places' is singular gerund phrase, so the verb must be 'allows' (third-person singular). Add a comma before 'and' if joining clauses. Suggestion: match verb number to gerund subject and use correct third-person singular form.