视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct grammar (plural/singular, articles), and use linking words to connect reasons and an example. Keep answers under five sentences.

示例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views because it lets me capture places I visit and remember special moments. For example, when I travelled to Japan, I took many photos of the temples and gardens, which were incredibly beautiful and full of detail.

建议: Organize into a clear topic sentence and two supporting reasons with correct grammar and linking words. Avoid vague or negative generalizations and filler sounds. Provide specific details or comparisons to explain why you prefer urban views.

示例: I prefer urban views because cities offer diverse architecture and vibrant street scenes. For example, in different countries you can see historic buildings, modern skyscrapers and lively markets, which give each city a unique atmosphere compared with the more similar countryside landscapes.

建议: Clarify the main point and correct vocabulary and grammar (e.g., 'wheels' → 'views', subject-verb agreement, articles). Use a clear topic sentence saying which you prefer, then add 1–2 specific supporting details and a linking phrase. Avoid incomplete sentences.

示例: I prefer the views in my own country because they reflect traditional culture and unique sights. For instance, Hong Kong combines historic temples, bustling harbours and modern skylines, which attract many tourists and make local views especially memorable.

× Of course, I like taking picture of different views.

✓ Of course, I like taking pictures of different views.

'Picture' should be plural 'pictures' because the speaker talks about taking multiple photos in general. Use plural nouns when referring to more than one or to the activity in general. Suggestion: Use 'pictures' for general plural meaning.

× I think it is a good opportunity to record the place that you visit and your memory.

✓ I think it is a good opportunity to record the places that you visit and your memories.

'Place' and 'memory' should be plural when speaking generally about multiple visits and memories. Also 'your memory' is vague; 'your memories' matches plural 'places'. Suggestion: Keep number consistent between nouns when referring to multiple items.

× And for example, when I travel to Japan, I take a lot of views from Japan.

✓ For example, when I travelled to Japan, I took a lot of photos of the views.

The sentence mixes present tense 'travel'/'take' with a past event 'when I travelled to Japan', so use past tense 'travelled' and 'took'. Also 'views from Japan' is awkward; 'photos of the views' is clearer. Suggestion: Match tense to the time reference; use past tense for past trips.

× They are really beautiful.

✓ They were really beautiful.

If referring to views seen on a past trip, 'were' (past tense) is appropriate. If keeping present generalization, 'are' could stay; however context indicates past trip, so change to past tense. Suggestion: Align verb tense with context (past experiences -> past tense).

× I prefer views in urban area because I think the rural area in all the country are usually similar.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because I think the rural areas in each country are usually similar.

Use plural 'areas' for general reference. 'All the country' is incorrect; 'each country' or 'every country' is correct. Also plural verb agreement follows noun number. Suggestion: Use plural nouns for general categories and correct quantifier phrases like 'each country'.

× They have they are also always mountain, sea, uh, plants is quite boring, but urban area in different countries are really.

✓ They always have mountains, seas, and plants, which I find quite boring, but urban areas in different countries are really varied.

Original has multiple problems: subjects and verbs do not agree ('plants is' should be 'plants are'); word order and conjunctions are misplaced. 'They have' needs specific plural nouns ('mountains, seas, and plants'). 'Urban area' should be plural 'urban areas' and require an adjective like 'varied' to complete idea. Suggestion: List items in parallel form and ensure subjects and verbs agree; complete comparative phrases.

× I prefer wheels in my country.

✓ I prefer views in my country.

'Wheels' is incorrect in context; likely a mispronunciation or typo for 'views'. Keep 'views' plural to match general preference. Suggestion: Use correct lexical item 'views'.

× I think my country have a traditional views.

✓ I think my country has traditional views.

Subject 'my country' is singular and requires singular verb 'has'. Also 'a traditional views' mixes singular article 'a' with plural 'views'—remove 'a' or make both singular/plural consistent. Suggestion: Ensure verb agrees with subject number and articles match noun number.

× It's attract many tours to come.

✓ It attracts many tourists to come.

Missing third-person singular verb inflection: 'attracts'. 'Tours' is the wrong noun; 'tourists' is appropriate. Also 'to come' is acceptable but could be omitted or rephrased. 'It' refers to the country/city; use 'attracts'. Suggestion: Use correct verb form for third person and correct noun 'tourists'.

× Hong Kong for travelling and Hong Kong is an international city.

✓ Hong Kong is good for travelling and is an international city.

Sentence fragment 'Hong Kong for travelling' lacks verb. Add 'is good for' to form a complete present-tense statement consistent with the following clause. Suggestion: Ensure each clause has a verb; use present tense 'is' for general facts.

× Although we don't have a loss of.

✓ Although we don't have a lot of land.

'A loss of' is an incorrect phrase here—likely mis-saying 'a lot of'. Context suggests 'land' (space) or 'areas' is intended. Replace with 'a lot of land' to make meaning clear and use plural/uncountable appropriately. Suggestion: Use the correct collocation 'a lot of' plus the appropriate noun (e.g., 'land').