视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cevap kısa ve anlaşılır olsa da çok fazla dolgu (uh, uh) ve dilbilgisi hatası var. Konuyu doğrudan belirten net bir konu cümlesi kullanın, gereksiz tekrarları çıkarın ve zaman ifadesini düzgün biçimde verin. Bağlaçlarla kısa destekleyici bilgiler ekleyin (ör. "because", "so", "for example"). Örneğin: 1) "Uh" gibi dolgu kelimelerini azaltmak için konuşmadan önce kısa bir duraklama yapın. 2) "one of the my best activities" yerine "one of my favourite activities" deyin. 3) Zaman ifadesini düzgün kullanın: "since primary school" ya da "I have enjoyed this since primary school."

示例: Yes, I do. Taking photographs is one of my favourite hobbies, and I usually go out on weekends to capture interesting places because I enjoy exploring new scenes. For example, I often visit local parks and markets to photograph people and architecture.

建议: Cümle yapısı ve dilbilgisi sorunları mevcut; ifade akışı doğal değil. Sebep belirtirken daha akıcı ve doğru gramer kullanın. Bağlaçlarla fikirlerinizi bağlayın ve iki kısa cümleyle düşüncenizi netleştirin. Örneğin: 1) "it's energy attracted me" yerine "I am attracted by the energy" deyin. 2) "Feel me good" yerine "It makes me feel good" kullanın. 3) Gerektiğinde bir örnek ekleyin: hangi şehir manzaralarını sevdiğinizi söyleyin.

示例: I prefer urban areas because I am attracted by the city's lively atmosphere and the energy of crowds. It makes me feel inspired, for example when I photograph busy streets and colourful markets.

建议: Cevap kısa ve belirsiz; tekrarlar ve dolgu kelimeler var. Nedenleri daha açık ve spesifik verin ve zaman ifadesini doğru kullanın. Bağlaçlarla sebep-sonuç ilişkisini kurun. Örneğin: 1) "ordinary by the time" ifadesi muğlak; yerine "become ordinary over time" kullanın. 2) Bir örnek verin: hangi özelliklerin farklı olduğunu söyleyin (mimari, kültür, renkler).

示例: I prefer views in other countries because scenery at home has become quite familiar to me over time. For example, I enjoy photographing foreign architecture and colourful street life because they feel fresh and different.

× Yes, I like this activity. Uh, taking pictures, uh, is one of the my best activities and I usually go out for, uh, taking interesting places, pictures, uh, on weekends, uh, since, uh, my primary school and I attended.

✓ Yes, I like this activity. Taking pictures is one of my favorite activities, and I usually go out to take pictures of interesting places on weekends since I was in primary school.

The sentence contains article errors and several structural issues. 'one of the my best activities' incorrectly uses the definite article 'the' before 'my'; correct phrase is 'one of my favorite activities'. 'favorite' is more natural than 'best' here. 'go out for, uh, taking interesting places, pictures' mixes prepositions and gerunds incorrectly; use 'go out to take pictures of interesting places'. The time expression 'since, uh, my primary school and I attended' is ungrammatical; correct to 'since I was in primary school' or 'since I attended primary school'. Suggestions: remove unnecessary filler words, use 'one of my favorite', use 'go out to take pictures of', and express duration with 'since' + past point ('since I was in primary school').

× I prefer urban areas because it's energy attracted me to taking its picture and the energy of crowds, people. Feel me good.

✓ I prefer urban areas because the energy there attracts me to take pictures, and the energy of the crowds makes me feel good.

Pronoun use and subject-verb structure are incorrect. 'it's energy' wrongly uses 'it' to refer to 'urban areas' and 'attracted me to taking its picture' mixes tense and pronouns. Use 'the energy there' to refer to urban areas, and present simple 'attracts me to take pictures' for a general preference. 'the energy of crowds, people. Feel me good.' lacks a subject and correct verb form; combine into 'the energy of the crowds makes me feel good.' Suggestions: use clear referent pronouns like 'there', use present simple for habitual preferences, and include proper subject-verb ('makes me feel').

× I prefer other countries because, uh, my country's the scenes, uh, seem to me ordinary by the time because, uh.

✓ I prefer other countries because my country's scenes seem ordinary to me now.

This sentence has structural and word order issues. 'my country's the scenes' incorrectly places 'the' and misorders noun phrases; use 'my country's scenes'. 'seem to me ordinary by the time' is awkward; 'seem ordinary to me now' or 'over time have become ordinary to me' is clearer. Suggestions: simplify to 'my country's scenes seem ordinary to me now' or 'have become ordinary to me over time', remove fillers, and keep natural adverb placement ('to me', 'now').