视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid awkward phrasing and redundancy (e.g., “keep the memories inside those pictures” and “reflect myself on the experience”). Use simpler, more idiomatic expressions.

示例: Yes, I love taking photos of different views. For example, I often photograph mountain tops and coastal scenery because they remind me of the trip and the feelings I had. These pictures help me remember special moments and the atmosphere of each place.

建议: Give a direct preference statement and support it with specific reasons. Avoid vague or exaggerated words like “state-of-the-art” and “outdated” without examples. Use linking words (e.g., because, however) to make your answer coherent, and correct grammar (subject-verb agreement).

示例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy photographing city skylines and modern architecture. For example, I like capturing glass skyscrapers and illuminated bridges at night because their shapes and lights create interesting compositions.

建议: Make a clear, grammatical statement of preference and give one or two concrete reasons or examples. Avoid repetition and unclear words (“guide kind of strange”). Use linking words (e.g., because, although) and correct articles and plurals.

示例: I prefer views in my own country because I appreciate the rustic atmosphere and peaceful rural scenes. For instance, I enjoy photographing quiet villages and rice fields that remind me of childhood weekends, which feel more familiar than landscapes abroad.

× I'm really into taking pictures of a wide range of views, for example the scenery or at the hill or at the top of a mountain.

✓ I'm really into taking pictures of a wide range of views, for example the scenery on a hill or at the top of a mountain.

Incorrect preposition use before 'hill' and unnecessary article 'the' with 'hill' in this context. Use 'on a hill' to indicate location on the slope or summit. Also keep parallel prepositions: 'on a hill' and 'at the top of a mountain.' Use 'a' not 'the' to refer to a general hill. Grammar problem type ID: 10

× I take pictures in order to keep the memories inside those pictures so that I can reflect myself on the experience.

✓ I take pictures to preserve the memories so that I can reflect on the experience.

Wordy and awkward phrasing: 'keep the memories inside those pictures' and 'reflect myself on' are incorrect. Use 'preserve the memories' (more natural) and the correct verb+preposition 'reflect on' (not 'reflect myself on'). Simplify 'in order to' to 'to.' Grammar problem type ID: 26

× While I could gravitate towards views in the urban areas, especially in the metropolis, I often take pictures here because the scenery here is really state-of-the-art as well as contain a lot of modern technologies compared to the countryside which is really outdated.

✓ While I could gravitate toward views in urban areas, especially in the city, I often take pictures here because the scenery is very modern and contains a lot of contemporary technology compared to the countryside, which is more outdated.

Multiple issues: article misuse ('the urban areas' -> 'urban areas'); word choice ('metropolis' awkward -> 'city'); subject-verb agreement and verb form ('contain' must be 'contains' to agree with 'the scenery'); adjective use ('state-of-the-art' better as 'very modern' in this context); punctuation needed before the relative clause. Keep consistent prepositions: 'gravitate toward' or 'gravitate to.' Grammar problem type ID: 22

× I could say that views in my country is much more favorable because I really love the rustic atmosphere as well as the tranquil sense of living in my own my own countries compared to other countries, which is really guide kind of strange or ex exotic to me to some certain extent.

✓ I could say that views in my country are much more favorable because I really love the rustic atmosphere and the tranquil sense of living in my own country compared to other countries, which seem somewhat strange or exotic to me to a certain extent.

Several errors: subject-verb agreement ('views ... are' not 'is'); repetition ('my own my own' removed); inconsistent noun number ('countries' -> 'country'); incorrect word order and extra words ('guide kind of strange or ex exotic' cleaned to 'seem somewhat strange or exotic'); 'to some certain extent' corrected to 'to a certain extent.' Grammar problem type ID: 27