视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 문장 구조와 발화의 유창성을 개선하세요. 현재 답변은 문장이 끊기고 불필요한 반복(예: "taking a pictures" / "the scenery. Makes us to")이 있습니다. 먼저 간단한 주제 문장으로 바로 답하고, 그 다음에 구체적인 이유와 예시를 한두 문장으로 연결하는 연습을 하세요. 또한 관사(a/the)와 복수형(pictures)을 정확히 사용하고, 문장 연결을 위해 접속사나 관계절을 사용하십시오. 예시 연습: 주제문 → 이유 → 구체적 예 순서로 2~3문장으로 답하기.

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because photos help me preserve memories of places I visit. For example, I often photograph sunsets and city skylines so I can remember the colours and atmosphere later.

建议: 명확하고 자연스러운 표현을 연습하세요. 현재 답변에는 반복과 문법 오류(예: "taking a photos", "I usually I tend to no")가 있어 이해하기 어렵습니다. 선호를 분명히 밝힌 다음, 이유를 간결하게 제시하고 구체적 예시를 덧붙이세요. 또한 연결어(because, so, for example)를 적절히 사용해 문장을 매끄럽게 만드세요.

示例: I prefer urban views because I like photographing buildings and night scenes. For example, I enjoy capturing illuminated skyscrapers and busy streets because they look dramatic in photos.

建议: 문법과 어휘 선택을 정확히 하세요. 복수/단수와 관사의 사용(another countries → other countries), 불완전한 문장과 반복을 고치세요. 먼저 명확한 주제문을 말하고, 그 다음에 구체적인 이유를 두세 문장으로 설명하세요. 또한 가능한 한 예시를 들어 비교를 명확히 하세요.

示例: I prefer views in other countries because many cities abroad have impressive architecture and vibrant night lighting. For instance, I loved photographing the illuminated skyline when I visited Dubai, which felt more spectacular than buildings at home.

× Yes, I like to take pictures of different views because I think taking a pictures of the scenery.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because I think taking pictures of the scenery

'Like' can be followed by verb+ing (gerund) or 'to' + base verb; choose one form to be consistent. Also 'a pictures' is incorrect: 'pictures' is plural and should not have 'a'. Use 'taking pictures' and remove the article. Suggestion: use 'I like taking pictures' or 'I like to take pictures'.

× Makes us to keep that memory for a long time.

✓ It helps us keep that memory for a long time.

This fragment lacks a clear subject and uses incorrect infinitive structure 'to keep' after 'makes us'. Use a full sentence with subject 'It' and verb 'helps' plus bare infinitive 'keep'. 'Makes us to keep' is ungrammatical; use 'helps us keep' or 'allows us to keep'.

× Between urban areas and rural areas, I prefer taking a photos of urban areas because I usually I tend to no my taste is more like a buildings and night views like that so.

✓ Between urban and rural areas, I prefer taking photos of urban areas because I usually prefer buildings and night views.

'a photos' is wrong: 'photos' is plural so no 'a'. The sentence is redundant and contains extraneous fragments ('I usually I tend to no my taste is more like'). Simplify: 'I usually prefer buildings and night views.' Remove unnecessary words for clarity.

× Because I usually I tend to no my taste is more like a buildings and night views like that so.

✓ I usually tend to prefer buildings and night views.

Pronoun and phrase confusion: 'I usually I tend to no' is incorrect repetition. 'My taste is more like a buildings' is ungrammatical; use 'I tend to prefer' or 'my taste leans toward'. Also 'a buildings' mixes singular article with plural noun. Correct to 'buildings'.

× I prefer another countries because in my country there are no special buildings like especially high buildings or beautiful lights, so I think there are.

✓ I prefer other countries because in my country there are no particularly tall buildings or decorative lights.

'Another countries' is wrong: 'another' is for singular; use 'other countries' for plural. 'Especially high buildings' is awkward; 'particularly tall buildings' is better. 'Beautiful lights' could be 'decorative lights'. Final clause 'so I think there are' is incomplete and unclear; remove it or clarify intent.