视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitations and repetitions, and add one or two specific examples with simple linking words. Aim for 2–3 sentences, correct article use and plural forms.

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I often photograph clouds at sunset and the greenery in local parks, and I sometimes capture animals when I visit nature reserves.

建议: Clarify your preference with a clear topic sentence and provide specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repeating words and unrelated phrases. Use vocabulary accurately (e.g., 'calm mood' instead of 'calm food'). Keep it within 2–3 coherent sentences.

示例: I prefer views in urban areas because old buildings and bicycles give the streets a charming, peaceful atmosphere. For example, I like photographing narrow lanes with vintage shops and people sitting at small cafés, which creates a calm mood.

建议: Give a clear, single-sentence preference and support it with two specific reasons, linked logically. Avoid repetition and correct plural/possessive forms ('my country', 'my family'). Include concrete examples (a festival name, a mountain) to make the answer more specific.

示例: I prefer views in my own country because of its beautiful mountains and rich traditions. For example, I enjoy photographing the local festival of [name] and the terraced hills near my hometown, and I also like taking pictures of family gatherings during celebrations.

× Yes, I love the taking pictures of different views, like clouds, like greeneries, like animals in, in in in different different places. I I love taking the pictures in different views.

✓ Yes, I love taking pictures of different views, like clouds, greenery, and animals in different places. I love taking pictures of different scenes.

The error is using an article plus gerund 'the taking' which is unnecessary; 'love' should be followed directly by the verb + -ing (gerund) without 'the'. Repetition and awkward noun choice 'greeneries' should be corrected to the uncountable noun 'greenery'. Remove repeated words and filler sounds. Suggestion: use 'love taking' and choose correct nouns (greenery, scenes) and avoid repetitions.

× I prefer urban areas views because some old houses, some old, some old bicycles, so and they are very peaceful.

✓ I prefer urban views because of old houses and old bicycles, and they are very peaceful.

The phrase 'urban areas views' is awkward; use 'urban views' or 'views in urban areas'. Repetition 'some old, some old' is redundant. Also sequencing of nouns was unclear; combine items with 'and'. Suggestion: simplify to 'I prefer urban views because of old houses and old bicycles; they are very peaceful.'

× That's why I choose the urban area, especially like a very calm food, very helpful.

✓ That's why I choose urban areas, especially because they are calm and quiet.

'Choose' should be in present simple to state preference but 'the urban area' vs plural mismatch; use 'urban areas' to match earlier. Phrase 'a very calm food, very helpful' is meaningless and structurally incorrect. Likely intended 'calm' and 'quiet'. Suggestion: state reasons clearly: 'they are calm and quiet.'

× That's why I choose urban areas.

✓ That's why I choose urban areas.

This sentence is acceptable grammatically; however if intended to mean habitual preference, 'choose' is okay. No change necessary.

× I prefer my own countries because there are many mountains, there are many, many traditional, many traditional festivals, and there are many, many of our low many, many like my my families.

✓ I prefer my own country because there are many mountains, many traditional festivals, and many of my relatives live there.

The student used plural 'countries' incorrectly when referring to their own nation; use singular 'country'. 'Many traditional, many traditional festivals' is repetitive and missing noun; condense to 'many traditional festivals'. 'Many of our low many, many like my my families' appears to be an attempt at 'many of our relatives live there' — 'low' is wrong word, and 'families' should be 'relatives' or 'family'. Suggestion: use clear plural nouns and correct verbs: 'many of my relatives live there.'

× That's why I choose my own countries.

✓ That's why I choose my own country.

Subject-verb agreement and noun number: 'own countries' conflicts with 'my' referring to a single country; choose singular 'country' to match intended meaning. If intending multiple countries, rephrase 'my own countries' and adjust context. Suggestion: use 'my own country' when referring to home nation.