打字— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words, remove repetition, and expand with one specific reason or example. Use linking words if you add details.

示例: I prefer handwriting because it feels more personal and tangible. For example, when I handwrite notes I remember them better, so I often write key ideas by hand before typing them up.

建议: Make a direct statement and give a clear reason. Correct grammar and avoid repeating words. Use a linking phrase to add one specific supporting detail.

示例: I usually type on a laptop keyboard because it’s built-in and convenient. For instance, I can work anywhere without carrying extra equipment, which saves time when I travel.

建议: Use simple past for past events and remove hesitations. State the time clearly, then give one specific detail about the learning experience using a linking word.

示例: I learned to type when I was eight years old. I took a typing class at school, and it was very enjoyable because we played fun games to improve our speed.

建议: Give a clear, grammatically correct answer with one or two specific methods. Avoid filler words and vague phrases, and use linking words to connect methods and reasons.

示例: I improve my typing by practicing with typing apps that include games, such as Mario-themed drills. I also practice by chatting online without looking at the keyboard, which helps increase my speed and accuracy.

× I prefer handwriting because it it makes a sense of reality.

✓ I prefer handwriting because it makes a sense of reality.

The error is a duplicated word ('it it'). Remove the extra 'it'. Also 'a sense of reality' is acceptable; no article change needed. Suggestion: say 'because it gives a sense of reality' for smoother phrasing.

× Whenever I write something, I felt like, uh, I put effort on it.

✓ Whenever I write something, I feel like I put effort into it.

The sentence mixes present-tense 'write' with past-tense 'felt'. Use present tense 'feel' to match 'whenever I write'. Also use the correct preposition 'into' with 'put effort into something'. Remove filler 'uh' in written form.

× I usually use the keyboard of the laptop because it it is attached to the laptop so I don't need to bring a more. A more functional.

✓ I usually use the laptop's keyboard because it is attached to the laptop, so I don't need to bring a more functional one.

Fix duplicated 'it it' and change 'keyboard of the laptop' to the possessive 'laptop's keyboard' for naturalness. 'Bring a more. A more functional.' is fragmented; combine to 'bring a more functional one', where 'one' replaces 'keyboard'. Include a comma before 'so'.

× I had learned to type on the keyboard when I was 8 years old and I had a an Etsy lesson to, uh, do the typing on the keyboard, which was extremely interesting to me.

✓ I learned to type on the keyboard when I was eight years old, and I had an EFL lesson to learn typing on the keyboard, which was extremely interesting to me.

Using past perfect 'had learned' is unnecessary when giving a simple past time ('when I was eight'). Use simple past 'learned'. Remove duplicate 'a an' and filler 'uh'. 'Etsy' seems wrong contextually; likely 'EFL' (English as a Foreign Language) or 'typing' lesson — replace with appropriate term. Use 'to learn typing' or 'to learn how to type' for clarity. Spell out 'eight' in formal writing.

× I always umm, practice my using keyboard ability by using uh, the apps to practice like Mario.

✓ I always practice my keyboard skills by using apps to practice, like Mario.

Remove filler 'umm' and 'uh'. Change 'practice my using keyboard ability' (awkward) to 'practice my keyboard skills'. 'Apps' does not need 'the'. Keep parallel structure: 'using apps to practice, like Mario' or better 'apps such as Mario'.

× Or maybe I always chat with my friends without seeing.

✓ Or maybe I always chat with my friends without seeing them.

The verb 'see' requires an object here; add 'them' to indicate whom you are not seeing. Alternatively say 'without seeing each other' or 'without meeting them' depending on intended meaning.