打字— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Give a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers, and make one or two specific reasons with linking words. Focus on coherence and concise expression (max 5 sentences).

示例: I prefer handwriting because it helps me concentrate better and remember information longer. For example, when I take notes on paper, I can organize ideas with arrows and summaries, which makes revision easier. Therefore, handwriting feels more effective for learning.

建议: Start with a direct answer, then give two concise and specific reasons using linking words. Reduce repetition and incorrect grammar; use correct verb forms and vocabulary.

示例: I type on a laptop every day because it is portable and convenient. Also, I have all my documents and apps on it, so I can find what I need quickly.

建议: Answer directly with a time reference, then explain briefly how you learned using clear sequence words (first, then). Avoid vague endings and filler words.

示例: I learned to type when I was about eight years old. First, I used an iPad for simple games, and then my mother bought me a laptop, so I practiced typing by doing homework and playing educational games.

建议: Give a specific, structured answer: state methods you use, give examples and results, and use linking words. Avoid unclear phrases and improve grammar and word choice.

示例: I improve my typing by practicing regularly: for instance, I do my homework and write a daily diary on my laptop. As a result, my speed and accuracy have improved, and I also use online typing exercises to practice difficult keys.

× I prefer to use handwriting because of, uh, when I write something on, uh, on paper or somewhere there, I feel more comfortable and, and say something more, uh, easy to understand and, uh, can, I can't focus on my lesson.

✓ I prefer handwriting because when I write on paper I feel more comfortable and I can express myself more clearly, but I can't focus on my lessons when I type.

This sentence has multiple issues: unnecessary filler words and repeated conjunctions cause poor sentence structure (Grammar Problem Type 26). The phrase 'because of, when' is incorrect; use 'because' or 'when' correctly. 'Say something more easy to understand' uses incorrect word order and adjective/adverb choice; use 'express myself more clearly' (Grammar Problem Type 13). 'Can, I can't focus' is contradictory and unclear; clarify with 'but I can't focus on my lessons when I type.' Suggestion: remove filler words, combine clauses with correct conjunctions, use 'express myself more clearly' and ensure logical contrast 'but'. Please note: This correction targets sentence-structure, conjunction use, and adjective/adverb choice as listed by the allowed problem types.

× I prefer to use laptop because when I use laptop I feel have a more comfortable and have a bond with my laptop.

✓ I prefer using a laptop because when I use one I feel more comfortable and I feel a bond with it.

Errors include missing article 'a' before 'laptop' (Grammar Problem Type 22) and incorrect phrase 'feel have a more comfortable' which is ungrammatical (Grammar Problem Type 14). Also repetition 'my laptop' can be replaced with pronoun 'it' (Grammar Problem Type 12). Suggestion: use 'using a laptop' or 'use a laptop', include articles, and use correct verbs: 'feel more comfortable' and 'feel a bond with it.' This correction focuses on article and quantifier/pronoun issues.

× This is more easy to use it and I have find everything on there.

✓ It is easier to use, and I can find everything on it.

'More easy' is incorrect; use the comparative 'easier' (Grammar Problem Type 25). 'Use it' should be 'use' or 'use it' without 'This is' awkwardness; rephrase to 'It is easier to use.' 'I have find' uses incorrect auxiliary and verb form; correct is 'I can find' or 'I have found' depending on meaning (Grammar Problem Type 9/6). Also 'on there' should be 'on it' (preposition/pronoun error, Grammar Problem Types 11 and 12). Suggestion: use correct comparative 'easier', appropriate modal 'can' for ability, and correct pronoun 'it.' Focus: sentence structure, comparative form, verb form, and preposition/pronoun choice.

× When I was a child, I have a, a little iPad, but, and then my mother bought me a laptop and I start to use a keyboard and write something on there.

✓ When I was a child, I had a small iPad, and then my mother bought me a laptop, and I started to use the keyboard and write on it.

Mixing past time marker 'When I was a child' with present perfect 'I have' is incorrect; use simple past 'I had' (Grammar Problem Type 5). 'I start to use' should be past 'I started to use' to match sequence (Grammar Problem Type 5). 'Write something on there' uses wrong pronoun/preposition; use 'write on it' (Grammar Problem Types 11 and 12). Suggestion: keep past tense consistently for past events and use correct pronouns.

× But then, uh, how to learn it's more, uh, useful.

✓ But learning how to type became more useful to me.

Original sentence is fragmented and uses incorrect structure 'how to learn it's more useful.' This is a sentence structure error (Grammar Problem Type 26) and incorrect verb form. Use gerund 'learning' to express the activity and a clear verb 'became' for past change (Grammar Problem Type 8/6). Suggestion: rephrase to 'learning how to type became more useful to me.' This correction targets sentence clarity and correct verb forms.

× I prefer to start on a do my homework on my key laptop and start to write my diary on my laptop.

✓ I prefer to start by doing my homework on my laptop and to begin writing my diary on it.

'Start on a do my homework' is ungrammatical; use 'start by doing my homework' (Grammar Problem Type 26 and 8). 'My key laptop' is unclear; likely 'my laptop.' Maintain parallel structure: 'start by doing... and begin writing...' Suggestion: use gerund after 'start by' and keep consistent nouns/pronouns.

× And I have focused on more easily because these days people are can more for useful advice and useful.

✓ I have become more focused because these days people can get more useful advice.

'I have focused on more easily' is ungrammatical: use present perfect 'I have become more focused' to describe a change (Grammar Problem Type 6/5). 'People are can' is incorrect modal combination; use 'people can get' (Grammar Problem Type 4). 'More for useful advice and useful' is redundant; simplify to 'more useful advice.' Suggestion: use correct perfect construction for state change, correct modal verb 'can', and avoid redundancy.