打字— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Reduce repetition and correct tense/word choice. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two concise supporting details with linking words. Also fix minor grammar (e.g., "I wrote" → "I write", remove duplicate "I").

示例: I prefer handwriting. For example, I write in my diary whenever I feel stressed because putting thoughts on paper helps me relax and think more clearly.

建议: Avoid repeating words and use one clear sentence for the main idea, then add a brief reason with a linking word. Correct small errors like duplicated words and unclear phrasing (e.g., "take take out away").

示例: Yes, I usually type on a laptop keyboard because it is portable and convenient for working in different places.

建议: Give a clear timeline and use correct grammar. Combine short fragments into coherent sentences and use linking words for clarity. Replace vague phrases like "maybe 6 years old" with "when I was about six" and correct verb forms.

示例: I learned to type when I was about six years old at kindergarten. Back then we used a simple program that made practice feel like a game, so I enjoyed learning.

建议: Provide a clearer method and avoid awkward expressions. Start with a topic sentence, then explain the practice routine and outcome using linking words. Replace "blind" with "touch-type" or "type without looking" and correct phrases like "Without as time goes on."

示例: I improve my typing by practicing regularly—typing exercises and online drills—and over time I learned to touch-type, so now I can type without looking at the keyboard.

× I I wrote diary from time to time whenever I feel stressed or overwhelming.

✓ I wrote in my diary from time to time whenever I felt stressed or overwhelmed.

The original has a duplicated word 'I', missing preposition 'in' for 'write in a diary', and mixes present tense 'feel' with past 'wrote' while using incorrect adjective 'overwhelming' instead of 'overwhelmed'. Use past tense consistently if referring to past habit ('wrote', 'felt'), include the preposition 'in' for diary, and use the adjective 'overwhelmed' to describe feelings. Suggestion: decide tense and keep it consistent; use 'write in my diary' and 'feel overwhelmed'.

× It really helps.

✓ It really helps.

No grammatical error for the question context; 'helps' correctly uses third person singular present tense to describe a current general effect. No change needed.

× Yes, often.

✓ Yes, I do, often.

Fragment 'Yes, often.' lacks a clear verb and subject. To answer the question about typing frequency, include subject and auxiliary verb: 'Yes, I do, often.' This completes the sentence and matches the present habitual tense.

× It's handy and easy to take take out away.

✓ It's handy and easy to take out and carry away.

The sentence contains a duplicated word 'take' and awkward phrasing 'take out away'. Use parallel verbs and a clearer phrase such as 'take out and carry away' or simply 'take with me'. Remove duplication.

× I learned to type on the keyboard when I was in kindergarten.

✓ I learned to type on the keyboard when I was in kindergarten.

This sentence is grammatically correct for past tense and needs no change. 'Learned' and 'was' correctly describe a past event.

× It was maybe 6 years old and it was a lot of fun.

✓ I was maybe six years old, and it was a lot of fun.

The pronoun 'it' incorrectly refers to the speaker's age; use 'I' for a person's age. Also write numbers under ten in words for formality: 'six'. Keep consistent subject usage: 'I was... and it was...'.

× Use the program to practice typing was like a game.

✓ Using the program to practice typing was like a game.

The original begins with a bare infinitive 'Use' making the sentence ungrammatical. A gerund phrase 'Using the program to practice typing' correctly functions as the subject. This matches past-tense 'was' and conveys that practicing felt like a game.

× Actually, I just do it again and again.

✓ Actually, I just do it again and again.

This sentence is acceptable to express a present habitual action; 'do it again and again' correctly uses present simple for habitual behavior. No grammatical correction required.

× Without as time goes on I can type without looking at it and even blind.

✓ As time went on, I could type without looking at the keyboard and even type blindly.

The original misuses 'Without' at the start and mixes tenses. Use 'As time went on' for past progression, change 'can' to 'could' to match past narrative, replace vague 'it' with 'the keyboard', and use the adverb 'blindly' or 'type blindly' rather than 'even blind'. Also add commas for clarity.