打字— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Reduce repetition, make a clear topic sentence, and give one specific supporting detail with a linking word. Keep to under five sentences and use varied vocabulary (e.g., “faster,” “more convenient,” “clearer”).

示例: I prefer typing to handwriting because it is much faster and more convenient. For example, when I text or email friends, I can compose messages quickly and edit them easily, which helps me communicate more clearly. Because of this speed and convenience, I use typing more often.

建议: Start with a direct topic sentence saying which you use daily, then give one or two concise supporting reasons using linking words (e.g., “because,” “so”). Avoid vague phrases like “some kind of” and replace with specific activities.

示例: I type on a desktop keyboard every day because I mainly work on school assignments at home. For example, I use it for writing essays and researching, so I can work more efficiently and finish tasks earlier.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence with an approximate time, then add one concise supporting detail explaining how you learned or why it was helpful. Use correct verbs (e.g., “learned,” “picked up”) and avoid awkward phrasing like “I can know this skill.”

示例: I learned to type when I was about six or seven, during the first years of primary school. At that time, our teachers introduced basic typing lessons, which helped me develop a skill I now use every day for homework and communication.

建议: Begin with a clear opinion, then give a specific method and an example of how it helps, using linking words like “for example” or “therefore.” Avoid repetitive words (e.g., “skill”) and improve grammar (e.g., “I’m a firm believer,” “by practicing regularly”).

示例: I'm a firm believer that regular practice is the best way to improve typing. For example, I practice with online typing exercises for 15 minutes each day, and as a result my speed and accuracy have improved noticeably.

× I prefer I prefer typing since it's much faster than handwriting.

✓ I prefer typing since it's much faster than handwriting.

The sentence repeats 'I prefer' which is unnecessary and creates a sentence structure error. Remove the duplicated phrase so the sentence is concise and grammatically correct.

× For example, when I'm texting with my friends, I can communicate with them more clearly and fast-paced.

✓ For example, when I'm texting with my friends, I can communicate with them more clearly and at a faster pace.

'Fast-paced' is an adjective and cannot modify the verb 'communicate' directly. Use the adverbial phrase 'at a faster pace' to describe the speed of communication, or use an adverb like 'more quickly.' This fixes the word class mismatch.

× This is what I like about typing and why I use it more.

✓ This is what I like about typing and why I use it more often.

The phrase 'use it more' is informal and can be unclear in this context; 'more often' clarifies frequency. Adjusting the adverb resolves the sentence structure and meaning.

× I don't use a laptop on a daily basis.

✓ I don't use a laptop daily.

'On a daily basis' is not wrong but wordy. 'Daily' is a clearer and more natural adverb. This is a style improvement; both are grammatically acceptable, but the shorter form fits spoken responses better.

× However, with the desktop I use it pretty often.

✓ However, I use the desktop pretty often.

The original placement of 'with' and the pronoun 'it' makes the sentence awkward. Move the subject and verb together: 'I use the desktop' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× I type in it every day for some kind of school work.

✓ I type on it every day for some kind of schoolwork.

We 'type on' a keyboard or computer, not 'type in' it. Also, 'schoolwork' is usually one word. These changes correct preposition choice and word form.

× It is more efficient and I can finish my things earlier.

✓ It is more efficient and I can finish my tasks earlier.

'My things' is vague and informal; 'my tasks' or 'my work' is more appropriate. This improves word choice and clarity.

× I don't really remember it.

✓ I don't really remember when I learned it.

The pronoun 'it' is vague here. Adding 'when I learned it' clarifies the object of 'remember' and yields a complete, natural response.

× I think I adapted it at the age of 6 or 7.

✓ I think I learned it at the age of six or seven.

'Adapted' is the wrong verb for acquiring a skill; 'learned' or 'was taught' is appropriate. Also spell out single-digit ages in formal writing. This corrects word choice and tense usage.

× That's when I started primary school and I'm pretty sure that they teach us that.

✓ That's when I started primary school and I'm pretty sure that they taught us that.

The first clause is past tense ('started'), so the following clause should also be past tense for consistency. Change 'teach' to 'taught' to match the time frame.

× I'm glad that I can know this skill and I can use it on a daily basis.

✓ I'm glad that I learned this skill and that I can use it on a daily basis.

'Can know' is unidiomatic. Use 'learned' to indicate acquisition of a skill, and keep 'can' for ability to use it now. This corrects verb choice and clarifies meaning.

× I'm a formal believer that you can only improve your typing by actually typing.

✓ I firmly believe that you can only improve your typing by actually practicing it.

'Formal believer' is incorrect; the idiom is 'firmly believe.' Also, 'typing' is repeated; 'practicing it' sounds more natural. This fixes word choice and improves fluency.

× Practicing this skill can make you more efficient in this skill.

✓ Practicing this skill can make you more efficient at it.

Repeating 'this skill' is redundant. Use 'at it' or 'in it' to avoid repetition. The correction retains the gerund 'practicing' but improves concision.

× I don't even realize and after typing for a day it's easier for me to do it.

✓ I don't even realize it, and after typing for a day it's easier for me to do.

The original lacks an object for 'realize' and ends with an extra 'it.' Add 'it' after 'realize' and remove the redundant final 'it' to make the sentence grammatically complete and less repetitive.