打字— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be clearer and more natural: start with a concise topic sentence, give one or two specific reasons using clear vocabulary, and avoid informal fillers (e.g., "umm," "and yeah"). Replace "illegal" (wrong word) with "illegible" and avoid repeating the same idea. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

示例: I prefer typing to handwriting because typed text is much easier to read. For example, when I receive handwritten notes they are often illegible, so typing helps me avoid misunderstandings and saves time.

建议: Be concise and accurate: start with the direct answer, then give one clear reason with correct vocabulary (e.g., "desktop requires mains power" rather than confusing phrasing). Remove hesitations and unnecessary clauses. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

示例: I use a laptop keyboard every day because it is portable and convenient. A desktop requires mains power and is difficult to move, so a laptop suits my lifestyle better.

建议: Provide a clear timeline and a specific supporting detail. Combine brief facts into a coherent 2–3 sentence answer and avoid vague expressions like "it was such a great experience" without explaining why. Use linking words for flow (e.g., "because," "so").

示例: I learned to type in 8th grade during ICT class. We had to type an essay about animal communication, which was time-consuming at first but helped me improve because I practiced a lot.

建议: Be more specific and organized: state your routine clearly, explain why it helps, and give an example of progress. Remove hesitations and redundant phrases. Use linking words (e.g., "so," "therefore").

示例: I improve my typing by practicing for five minutes daily, focusing on accuracy and speed drills. For example, I do timed exercises where I type as many words as possible, which has increased my speed and allowed me to write longer texts more comfortably.

× I feel like it's much more easier to carry around, whereas like a desktop is usually, uh, battery is not a battery powered.

✓ I feel like it's much easier to carry around, whereas a desktop usually is not battery-powered.

The phrase 'much more easier' is redundant and incorrect because 'easier' is already the comparative form; use 'much easier' or 'more easy' (the latter is uncommon). Also, 'battery is not a battery powered' is awkward and ungrammatical; the correct adjective form is 'battery-powered' placed after or before the noun. Suggestion: use 'much easier' and 'battery-powered' for clarity. ID:13

× some handwritings are illegal and you cannot really just understand what the person is writing because some people use certain handwriting that are very illegible to be honest.

✓ Some handwriting is illegible and you cannot really understand what the person is writing because some people use a style of handwriting that is very illegible, to be honest.

'Handwritings' is incorrect: 'handwriting' is an uncountable noun, so use singular 'handwriting' or 'styles of handwriting'. 'Are illegal' is incorrect word choice; likely meant 'illegible'. 'Certain handwriting that are' mixes singular/plural: use 'a style of handwriting that is' or 'handwriting that is'. Also remove redundant 'just'. Suggestion: use 'handwriting' as uncountable, choose correct adjective 'illegible', and match singular/plural agreement. ID:12

× And yeah, that's why.

✓ That's why I prefer typing.

The original fragment 'And yeah, that's why.' is informal and lacks clear connection to the stated reason. It is a sentence fragment that does not stand alone well in formal responses. Improve by restating the conclusion fully: 'That's why I prefer typing.' This clarifies the referent and completes the thought. ID:26

× I first learned to type on a keyboard when I was in 8th grade.

✓ I first learned to type on a keyboard when I was in the 8th grade.

In many varieties of English, school grade references often take the definite article: 'in the 8th grade' or 'in eighth grade' (both are acceptable). Adding 'the' or using 'eighth grade' spells out the number to improve formality. Suggestion: use 'in the 8th grade' or 'in eighth grade'. ID:22

× It was during UH ICT class.

✓ It was during an ICT class at UH.

The original word order 'during UH ICT class' is understandable but awkward. Reordering and adding an article improves clarity: 'during an ICT class at UH' or 'during the ICT class at UH' if a specific class is meant. Suggestion: include an article and natural word order. ID:16

× We had to type an essay that is related to animals and how they communicate with one another.

✓ We had to type an essay that was related to animals and how they communicated with one another.

The main clause is in the past tense ('We had to'), so the relative clause should also use past tense for consistency: 'was related' and 'communicated'. Mixing present tense ('is related', 'communicate') with past in narration is inconsistent. Suggestion: keep verb tenses consistent when describing past events. ID:5

× I remember it was very time consuming for me to write, but it was such a great experience.

✓ I remember it was very time-consuming for me to write, but it was a great experience.

'Time consuming' should be hyphenated when used as a compound adjective before or after the verb: 'time-consuming'. 'Such a great experience' is informal but acceptable; removing 'such' tightens the sentence. Suggestion: use hyphenation for compound adjectives and avoid unnecessary intensifiers. ID:13

× I usually practice typing for a set period of time, like 5 minutes, and I try to type on a key on the keyboard as many words as possible just to get my hands going and umm to increase my typing speed.

✓ I usually practice typing for a set period of time, like five minutes, and I try to type as many words as possible to get my hands going and to increase my typing speed.

'Try to type on a key on the keyboard as many words as possible' is confusing and redundant. 'Type as many words as possible' is the intended meaning. Also, write numbers under ten as words in formal writing ('five minutes'). Remove filler 'umm' and ensure infinitive 'to increase' parallels 'to get'. Suggestion: streamline the phrase and maintain parallel structure for infinitives. ID:8

× I feel like that has really helped me speed up while typing. I could now write more.

✓ I feel like that has really helped me speed up while typing. I can now write more.

'I could now write more' mixes modal past/present: 'could' implies past ability. Because the speaker refers to a current result of practice ('has really helped'), use 'can now' to express present ability. Suggestion: use 'can now' for present capability. ID:6