打字— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be clearer and more grammatical. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid hesitations and repetitions, and correct basic grammar (e.g., say “I prefer typing to handwriting,” “I work for a construction company,” “it’s easier, more comfortable and convenient”).

示例: I prefer typing to handwriting. For example, I work for a construction company and I often need to prepare reports and emails, so typing is faster and more convenient. Because it saves time and is easier to edit, I usually choose typing over handwriting.

建议: This answer is generally clear but could be improved by a stronger topic sentence and one specific detail. Remove filler words like “uh.” Use a linking word to add an example or reason, and be concise (max 5 sentences).

示例: I usually type on a laptop because it is portable and convenient. For instance, I can carry it between the office and construction sites, so I can write emails or update documents whenever needed.

建议: Organize chronologically and correct grammar. Begin with a clear time phrase, then explain why you learned at an institute and give one specific detail. Avoid unclear phrases and vocabulary errors (e.g., “foundation to lawn typing” is incorrect).

示例: I learned to type shortly after I finished high school. Because my government school had no computer classes, I joined a local typing institute where I learned touch-typing and basic computer skills, which really helped me later at work.

建议: Be specific about methods you use to improve typing and avoid vague phrases. Start with a topic sentence (e.g., “I improve my typing by…”) then give one or two concrete methods and connect them with linking words. Correct word choice (e.g., “bachelor’s degree,” “software,” “it makes it easier”).

示例: I improve my typing by practicing regularly on my laptop and using online typing exercises. For example, during my bachelor’s degree I typed many project reports and also learned new software, which increased my speed and accuracy.

× 'I prefer typewriting over the handwriting UH, because I'm currently working in a guy in a in a construction company as a employer, typing makes easier and comfortable and convenient to me.'

✓ 'I prefer typing to handwriting because I am currently working as an employee at a construction company, and typing is easier, more comfortable, and more convenient for me.'

'Subject-verb agreement and sentence structure: "typewriting" is unnatural; use "typing" (gerund). Use "prefer X to Y" not "over" for preferences. "working in a guy in a in a construction company as a employer" is ungrammatical and has incorrect prepositions and articles; correct to "working as an employee at a construction company." Also need parallel comparative forms: "easier, more comfortable, and more convenient." Improve by simplifying the clause order and ensuring subject-verb agreement and correct article usage.'

× 'I prefer to use laptop because it is comfortable and convenient, uh, to type and carry with me whenever I go, so I use it.'

✓ 'I prefer to use a laptop because it is comfortable and convenient to carry and use whenever I go.'

'Article errors and word order: "use laptop" needs the indefinite article "a laptop." The original repeats unnecessary phrases and has awkward order "to type and carry with me whenever I go"; better: "to carry and use whenever I go." Remove filler words and maintain clear verb sequence.'

× 'When I was just complete my high school, I I had joined an institute for typing because on I studied on the government school, there is no facility for typing and computer classes.'

✓ 'When I had just completed high school, I joined an institute for typing because I had studied at a government school where there were no facilities for typing or computer classes.'

'Past tense and sentence structure errors: Use past perfect "had completed" for an action completed before another past action, and simple past "joined" for the subsequent action. "I had joined" alone is incorrect in this context. Prepositions and articles: use "studied at a government school" not "on the government school." Use plural "facilities" and conjunction "where" to combine clauses. Keep tense sequence consistent.'

× 'So the institute is the foundation to lawn typing.'

✓ 'So the institute was the foundation for learning typing.'

'Sentence structure and word choice errors: "lawn" is a typo for "learn"; use "learning typing" or better "learning to type." Also tense: since referring to past events, use past tense "was." Preposition: "foundation for" is correct collocation.'

× 'Oh, during my balance degree, I usually use laptops to complete my projects in the final years.'

✓ 'During my bachelor's degree, I usually used a laptop to complete my projects in my final years.'

'Present tense and word choice: "balance degree" is likely "bachelor's degree." Use past tense "used" because the action refers to past study. Number agreement: "laptops" can be singular "a laptop" when referring to the device the student used. Keep tense consistent with the time frame.'

× 'Similarly, I'd also learn different softwares through these activities.'

✓ 'Similarly, I also learned different software through these activities.'

'Verb + -ing and word form errors: "I'd also learn" is incorrect for past events; use "I also learned." "Software" is an uncountable noun, so use "software," not "softwares." Maintain past tense to match context.'

× 'It makes easier to.'

✓ 'It made things easier.'

'Adverb placement and sentence completeness: The original is incomplete and incorrect in word order. Use a clear subject and verb "It made things easier." Keep tense consistent with surrounding past-tense statements.'