旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời có ý định đưa ra sự so sánh giữa việc đi máy bay và đi xe buýt, nhưng phần diễn đạt còn nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và lặp từ. Em nên trả lời trực tiếp ngay từ đầu, ví dụ “It depends on the type of transport.” Sau đó, dùng cấu trúc rõ ràng “On a plane, I prefer..., whereas on a bus, I prefer...” và sửa “by plan” thành “by plane”, “prefer sit” thành “prefer sitting”. Em cũng cần nói chính xác “sit by the window” thay vì các cụm không tự nhiên như “outside chair” hoặc “outside light”.

示例: It depends on the type of transport. When I travel by plane, I prefer sitting by the window because I enjoy looking at the clouds and the scenery below. However, on a bus, I sometimes choose an aisle seat because it is easier to get up and move around.

建议: Em đã trả lời trực tiếp “No” và đưa ra lý do, nhưng cần sửa nhiều lỗi về thì, cấu trúc và cách dùng từ. Vì câu hỏi nói về thời thơ ấu, hãy dùng quá khứ nhất quán: “my parents had to work hard” và “we didn’t have many opportunities”. Cụm “work hard a lot to for us to have” nên được thay bằng “worked hard to provide us with a house and a car”. Em có thể kết thúc bằng một chi tiết cụ thể hoặc một cảm nhận để câu trả lời tự nhiên và đầy đủ hơn.

示例: No, I didn’t. When I was a child, my parents had to work hard to provide us with a house and a car, so we didn’t have many opportunities to take long trips. We usually spent our holidays at home or visited relatives nearby.

× I prefer sit outside.

✓ I prefer sitting outside.

After prefer, a gerund can be used. Therefore, sit should be changed to sitting. You can also say I prefer to sit outside, but do not use prefer sit.

× I prefer sitting outside like the outside light, the outside chair.

✓ I prefer sitting by the window because I like the natural light and the window seat.

The original sentence has an unclear structure, and like is not connected correctly to the ideas that follow it. Use because to introduce the reason for your preference and combine the related ideas into a complete sentence.

× When I sit on the bus I need to sit on like next to the window.

✓ When I travel by bus, I need to sit next to the window.

The correct preposition in this expression is next to, not sit on next to. Also, travel by bus is more natural than sit on the bus when describing the journey.

× When I was a child, my family, especially my parents had to work hard a lot to for us to have a house, have a car like right now.

✓ When I was a child, my parents had to work very hard to provide our family with a house and a car.

The original sentence contains the unnecessary combination to for us and repeats the structure have a house, have a car. Use one clear infinitive structure, such as to provide us with, and join the two objects with and.

× So we don't have an opportunity to travel long time.

✓ So we did not have an opportunity to travel for a long time.

The question asks about the student's childhood, so the answer should use the past tense. Change don't have to did not have. Remember to use the past tense when describing situations that were true during a completed period in the past.

× We did not have an opportunity to travel a long time.

✓ We did not have an opportunity to travel for a long time.

When long time describes the duration of an activity, use the preposition for: travel for a long time. This pattern is used to express how long something continued.

× We don't have we don't have an opportunity to travel long time.

✓ We did not have an opportunity to travel for a long time.

The phrase we don't have is repeated, which makes the sentence disfluent and structurally incorrect. State the subject and verb only once, and use the complete structure have an opportunity to do something.