旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer directly and support your preference with one or two specific details. Correct the grammar by saying “when I travel” rather than “when I traveling,” use the uncountable noun “scenery” instead of “many scenery,” and replace the unnatural phrase “changing scenarily” with “watching the scenery change” or “enjoying the changing scenery.” Also, use a linking word such as “For example” to introduce Mount Fuji.

示例: Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I travel because I enjoy watching the scenery change. For example, I once saw Mount Fuji during a train journey, which made the trip especially memorable.

建议: Answer in the past tense because the question refers to your childhood: use “had” rather than “have.” Add the articles “a” and “an” in “a long journey” and “an enjoyable experience,” and avoid repeating similar adjectives such as “fun and enjoyable.” To make the answer more effective, mention where you went, how long the journey took, or what you did with your family.

示例: Yes, I had a long journey with my family when I was about ten years old. We drove to the seaside, and the trip took nearly six hours. Although it was tiring, I enjoyed talking and playing games with my siblings along the way.

× Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I traveling because I can watch many scenery such as Mount Fuji and I love changing scenarily.

✓ Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I travel because I can watch many scenery such as Mount Fuji and I love changing scenarily.

The sentence describes a general preference or habitual situation, so use the present simple verb travel after when. Traveling cannot be used alone as the main verb without an auxiliary verb such as am.

× Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I traveling because I can watch many scenery such as Mount Fuji and I love changing scenarily.

✓ Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I travel because I can watch a lot of scenery such as Mount Fuji and I love changing scenarily.

Scenery is an uncountable noun, so it cannot normally be used with many. Use a lot of scenery or much scenery. In natural speaking, a lot of scenery is more common.

× Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I traveling because I can watch many scenery such as Mount Fuji and I love changing scenarily.

✓ Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I travel because I can watch many scenery such as Mount Fuji and I love the changing scenery.

Scenarily is not the correct word in this sentence. Use the noun scenery to describe the views that change during a journey. You can improve this further by saying I love seeing the changing scenery.

× Yes, I have a long journey with my family when I was a child. It was very fun and enjoyable experience for me. Oh.

✓ Yes, I had a long journey with my family when I was a child. It was very fun and enjoyable experience for me. Oh.

The journey happened when you were a child, so it is a completed event in the past. Use the past-tense verb had instead of the present perfect form have.

× Yes, I have a long journey with my family when I was a child. It was very fun and enjoyable experience for me. Oh.

✓ Yes, I have a long journey with my family when I was a child. It was a very fun and enjoyable experience for me. Oh.

Experience is a singular countable noun in this sentence, so it needs the indefinite article a. The natural structure is a very fun and enjoyable experience.