旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer directly with “Yes, I prefer a window seat.” Use “window seat” and “aisle seat,” not “air seat.” Also, replace “trust” with “choose” or “prefer,” and use the natural phrase “kill time.” Avoid repeating “landscapes”; give one specific reason and connect your ideas with a linking word such as “because” or “also.”

示例: Yes, I definitely prefer a window seat when I travel. I enjoy looking at the scenery during the flight, and it also helps me kill time. In addition, I find it more relaxing than sitting in an aisle seat.

建议: Begin with a clear answer, such as “Yes, I did,” and state how long the journey lasted. Use the past tense consistently: “We talked,” not “We talk we talked.” Replace “share our mind” and “familiar bond” with natural expressions such as “share our thoughts” and “strengthen our family bond.” Organize the response with a reason or result, using “because” or “as a result.”

示例: Yes, I did. When I was a child, my family and I sometimes went on road trips that lasted several hours. Although the journeys were long, they were enjoyable because we talked, shared stories, and strengthened our family bond.

× Yes, I trust the window seat every time I don't want to choose the air seat because for example on the flight I want to see the landscapes from the window and to Killer Time I want to enjoy its beautiful landscapes.

✓ Yes, I choose the window seat whenever I travel. I do not want to choose the aisle seat because, for example, on a flight, I want to look at the scenery through the window and kill time by enjoying the view.

The original sentence contains several ideas joined together without a clear structure. The phrase to Killer Time is also incorrectly formed and capitalized. Use separate sentences and connect the ideas clearly. The correct expression is kill time, followed by by + verb-ing when explaining how you spend the time.

× Actually know it about a few hours but by driving but it's a very enjoyable experience.

✓ Actually, no, it was a journey of a few hours, and we traveled by car. It was a very enjoyable experience.

The original sentence is incomplete and contains repeated conjunctions. It also needs a clear subject and verb. The phrase about a few hours should be changed to a journey of a few hours to form a complete, natural sentence.

× Actually know it about a few hours but by driving but it's a very enjoyable experience.

✓ Actually, no, it was a journey of a few hours, and we traveled by car. It was a very enjoyable experience.

By driving is not the most natural prepositional phrase for describing the method of travel in this sentence. Use by car or in the car instead.

× Actually know it about a few hours but by driving but it's a very enjoyable experience.

✓ Actually, no, it was a journey of a few hours, and we traveled by car. It was a very enjoyable experience.

The question asks about a journey during your childhood, so the answer should use the past tense. Change it is to it was and use traveled and was for past events.

× We talk we talked to each other about the many things to share our mind which makes a bond, familiar bond.

✓ We talked to each other about many things and shared our thoughts, which created a close bond between us.

Because the experience happened in the past, the verbs should be in the past tense: talked, shared, and created. The original sentence also repeats talk and talked, so only the correctly formed past-tense verb should remain.

× We talk we talked to each other about the many things to share our mind which makes a bond, familiar bond.

✓ We talked to each other about many things and shared our thoughts, which created a close bond between us.

The plural subject we refers to both family members, so mind should be plural when referring to the thoughts of more than one person. The natural expression is shared our thoughts.