旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答直接表达了偏好，也给出了两个理由，但存在明显的重复和自我修正，如“definitely I definitely”“when I sit near the sit by the window”。建议先用一句完整的主题句回答，再用“because”连接理由；同时注意使用“take photos”这一更自然的表达。控制在2—3句话内，避免重复和过多停顿。

示例: Yes, I definitely prefer sitting by the window when I travel because I enjoy watching the scenery go by. I can also take photos whenever I see something interesting.

建议: 回答的基本意思可以理解，但时态不一致：过去经历应使用“didn't have”或“didn't go”，而不是“don't have”。“my mom and my mom and mother and father”重复且表达错误，应改为“my parents”；“go out for work”可改为“go to work”。另外，家庭关系这一信息与问题不完全相关，建议重点说明没有长途旅行的原因，并使用“because”组织答案。

示例: No, I didn’t have many long journeys with my family when I was a child because my parents were usually busy with work. We mostly stayed at home or took short trips nearby.

× Yes, I definitely I definitely like to sit by the window when I'm traveling. like when I like to see the scenery go by when I sit near the sit by the window and I like and if I want, I can take a picture

✓ Yes, I definitely like to sit by the window when I'm traveling. I like to see the scenery go by when I sit by the window, and if I want, I can take a picture.

原句中有重复、断裂和不完整的句子结构，例如“ I definitely”重复了两次，“like when I like”和“sit near the sit by”使句子结构混乱。回答时应先说主要观点，再用完整句子解释原因。建议避免重复词语，并确保每个句子都有清晰的主语、谓语和宾语。

× No, I don't have a long journey with my family because my parents are very busy when I was young and they often they often go out for work work and my mom and my mom and mother and father don't have a really friendly relationship.

✓ No, I didn't have long journeys with my family because my parents were very busy when I was young. They often went out for work, and my mother and father didn't have a very good relationship.

问题发生在描述童年经历时使用了现在时。因为“when I was young”表示过去，所以相关动词都应使用过去时：“don't have”改为“didn't have”，“are”改为“were”，“go”改为“went”。另外，“a long journey”改为复数“long journeys”更符合泛指多次旅行的语境。回答过去经历时，要保持整段内容的时态一致。