旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答直接，给出了原因和例子，结构基本清晰。可以减少重复，例如“it is very comfortable”和“it can help me relax”可以合并；“see some views”不自然，建议改为“enjoy the view”或“look at the scenery”。此外，可以使用“especially”连接具体情境，使表达更自然、更有效。

示例: Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I travel because I can enjoy the view and relax. For example, when I’m on a plane, I like looking down at the clouds and watching the scenery outside. It also makes long journeys feel more enjoyable.

建议: 回答了问题，但第二句存在明显的语法和表达问题：“We went to a Chinese place, is...”缺少主语和谓语连接，“called”后面也没有说明地点名称。建议先清楚说明目的地，再补充旅程时长、交通方式或具体感受；可以使用“because”“although”或“so”增强逻辑。避免重复使用“when I was a child”，并确保答案控制在3—4句内。

示例: Yes, I did. When I was about ten, my family took a long train journey to Xi’an, a city famous for its traditional culture. It took nearly eight hours, but I enjoyed it because I was excited to visit the ancient sites. I still remember eating snacks and playing games with my cousins on the train.

× We went to a Chinese place, is a very traditional place called and it took a long time.

✓ We went to a Chinese place. It was a very traditional place, and it took a long time to get there.

原句把多个完整意思用逗号连接，造成句子结构混乱；“called”后面也缺少被称呼的名称，导致表达不完整。建议将不同的意思拆成两个句子，并使用清晰的连接词来组织信息。

× We went to a Chinese place, is a very traditional place called and it took a long time.

✓ We went to a Chinese place. It was a very traditional place, and it took a long time to get there.

故事发生在过去，前文使用了过去时“went”，所以描述这个地方时也应使用过去时“was”，不能使用现在时“is”。谈论过去发生的事情时，要保持动词时态一致。