旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cevabınız soruya doğrudan yanıt veriyor ve pencere kenarını tercih etmeniz için nedenler sunuyor. Ancak “you don't need to be depressed” bu bağlamda doğal değildir; bunun yerine “you don’t feel bored” veya “it helps me relax” kullanabilirsiniz. Ayrıca “comfortable and relaxed” ile “peaceful” benzer anlamları tekrar ediyor. Cevabı daha akıcı yapmak için “because” ve “also” gibi bağlaçları kullanarak iki net cümleye ayırın ve “when you are sitting” yerine genel bir ifade olarak “when I sit” kullanın.

示例: Absolutely. I prefer sitting by the window because I can enjoy the scenery and watch the landscape change during the journey. It also helps me relax and makes long trips feel less boring.

建议: Cevabınız soruya doğrudan cevap veriyor ve seyahatlerin nedenini açıklıyor; ancak zaman uyumu konusunda hatalar var. Geçmişten bahsettiğiniz için “we were living” yerine daha doğal olarak “we lived”, “my grandparents live” yerine “my grandparents lived” ve “we have to travel” yerine “we had to travel” kullanmalısınız. Ayrıca “travel to Muğla to Denizli” yerine “travel from Muğla to Denizli” demek gerekir. Cevabı daha etkili yapmak için yolculuğun ne kadar sürdüğünü, nasıl seyahat ettiğinizi veya neden aklınızda kaldığını belirtin.

示例: Yes, I did. When I was a child, my family lived in Muğla, while my grandparents lived in Denizli, so we had to travel between the two cities quite often. The journey took several hours by car, but I enjoyed it because we talked, listened to music, and stopped for snacks along the way.

× Absolutely, I prefer that because when you are sitting by the window you can see the view and you don't need to be depressed you can feel comfortable and relaxed and I think it makes people peaceful.

✓ Absolutely, I prefer that because when you sit by the window, you can see the view. You do not need to feel uncomfortable; you can feel comfortable and relaxed, and I think it makes people feel peaceful. So, I prefer it.

The original sentence contains several independent clauses joined together without proper punctuation or conjunctions, creating a run-on sentence. Separate the ideas into shorter sentences and use a conjunction or punctuation when joining clauses. Also, people usually feel peaceful, so feel peaceful is more natural than makes people peaceful.

× You don't need to be depressed.

✓ You do not need to feel uncomfortable.

Depressed means very sad or emotionally low, so it does not express the intended meaning here. Use uncomfortable to describe an unpleasant physical feeling, or use relaxed to describe the positive feeling of sitting by the window.

× When I was a child we were living in Mula but my grandparents live in Denisle so we were in different cities.

✓ When I was a child, we lived in Mula, but my grandparents lived in Denizli, so we were in different cities.

The answer describes a situation in the past, introduced by When I was a child. Therefore, live must be changed to the past form lived. Use the past tense consistently when describing past circumstances.

× So we have to travel to Mula to Denisle every time.

✓ So we had to travel from Mula to Denizli every time.

Have to is in the present tense, but the question asks about a childhood experience in the past. Use had to for past obligation. The past form keeps the tense consistent with When I was a child.

× We have to travel to Mula to Denisle every time.

✓ We had to travel from Mula to Denizli every time.

Use from to indicate the starting point of a journey and to to indicate the destination. Therefore, the correct structure is travel from Mula to Denizli.