旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer the question directly and then explain why. Replace the unnatural phrase “see out of the window about” with “look out of the window at,” and use “mountains and rivers” instead of “wheels of mountain liver.” Avoid repeating “I love” and add a more specific reason, such as enjoying the view or taking photographs. Use linking words such as “because” and “also” to connect your ideas naturally.

示例: Yes, I do. I prefer a window seat because I enjoy looking at the scenery, especially the mountains and rivers. It also makes long journeys more interesting, and I sometimes take photographs of the views.

建议: Use a more natural opening, such as “Yes, I did,” and avoid repeating the same idea. Replace “because in there there are” with “because it has,” and use “beautiful beaches and clear blue water” instead of “beautiful ocean and white beach.” Add a specific detail about what you did during the journey or why you remember it. Keep the answer focused and connect the reason and result clearly.

示例: Yes, I did. When I was a child, my father often took my family and me on long trips to southern Thailand because it has beautiful beaches and clear blue water. I especially remember swimming and eating seafood together, so those journeys were very memorable.

× I love to sit near the window when travelling because I love to see out of the window about the scenery wheels of mountain liver.

✓ I love to sit near the window when travelling because I love to see the mountain scenery out of the window.

The preposition about is not used after see in this structure. Use see something out of the window or look at something through the window. The corrected sentence uses see the mountain scenery out of the window.

× My dad often took me to the southern part of Thailand because in there there are a lot of beautiful ocean and white beach.

✓ My dad often took me to the southern part of Thailand because there were a lot of beautiful oceans and white beaches there.

The expression in there is incorrect and unnecessary. Use there were to introduce plural places or things in the past. The word there can be placed at the end to indicate location.

× My dad often took me to the southern part of Thailand because in there there are a lot of beautiful ocean and white beach.

✓ My dad often took me to the southern part of Thailand because there were a lot of beautiful oceans and white beaches there.

The main verb took describes a repeated action in the past, so the related description should also use the past form were rather than the present form are. Using were makes the answer more consistent with the past-time context.

× My dad often took me to the southern part of Thailand because in there there are a lot of beautiful ocean and white beach.

✓ My dad often took me to the southern part of Thailand because there were a lot of beautiful oceans and white beaches there.

After a lot of, countable nouns should normally be plural. Therefore, ocean becomes oceans and beach becomes beaches. In speaking, you can also say a lot of beautiful ocean views and white beaches.