旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct basic grammar (e.g., avoid repeated words and use correct forms: "I love sitting by the window"), and replace vague phrases like "others journey" with clearer expressions (e.g., "long journeys"). Keep the answer to no more than 3–4 sentences.

示例: I prefer sitting by the window when I travel because I enjoy the scenery. For example, on long bus or plane journeys I like watching the landscapes and cities go by, which helps me relax. Also, having a window seat makes it easier to take photos of interesting views.

建议: Give a direct, grammatical topic sentence, then add two concrete details with linking words. Use correct tenses for past experiences and spell place names correctly. Avoid repetition and unclear fragments; mention one or two memorable trips and why they stood out. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

示例: Yes. As a child I often went on long trips with my family, for example to Cox's Bazar and Sylhet. Those trips were memorable because we spent time on the beach and explored tea gardens, and I remember feeling excited about sleeping in a car and seeing new places.

× Yes I love to sit sitting window sight because it's the most beautiful view we can see and when I traveled other's journey and there I preferred the window seat

✓ Yes, I love to sit by the window because it has the most beautiful view, and when I travel I prefer the window seat.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'sit sitting window sight' and 'traveled other's journey' and mixes tenses. Replace the redundant 'sit sitting window sight' with 'sit by the window' (correct preposition and noun phrase). Use present simple 'travel' and 'prefer' to match the general habit. 'It has the most beautiful view' is clearer than 'it's the most beautiful view we can see'. Also add commas and articles for clarity.

× Yes, I have a long journey with my family.

✓ Yes, I had a long journey with my family.

The context asks about childhood (past), so past simple 'had' is required rather than present perfect 'have'. Use past simple to indicate a completed past event.

× I went to the cocksbazar, I went to the sealate, I went to other any I went to I went to the field, I want to any place with my family and it was so

✓ I went to Cox's Bazar, Sylhet, and many other places. I also went to the countryside; I wanted to visit any place with my family and I enjoyed it.

The original is ungrammatical and repetitive ('I went to' repeated, incorrect place names, 'other any'). Correct by listing places with proper nouns (Cox's Bazar, Sylhet), using 'many other places' for plural quantifier, and replacing unclear fragments with coherent clauses. Use past tense 'wanted' and 'enjoyed' to match the past context. Also fix capitalization and possessive in 'Cox's Bazar'.