旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Сфокусируйтесь на более естественной структуре предложения и исправлении грамматических ошибок. Избегайте лишних слов и звуков (например, «uh», «so»). Используйте связующие слова, чтобы предложение было логичным: начните с прямого утверждения, затем добавьте причину и конкретный пример. Исправьте слова с ошибками (plane вместо plan, gives вместо give, emotions вместо new emotions — можно сказать "a sense of excitement"). Ограничьтесь 2–3 предложениями, избегая повторов.

示例: Yes, I prefer sitting by the window because I enjoy the view. For example, seeing the sea or the landscape from a plane gives me a sense of excitement and makes the journey more memorable.

建议: Исправьте времена и повторяющиеся слова, используйте правильный порядок слов и артикли. Начните с простого ответа в прошлом (Yes, I did), затем добавьте одно-две конкретные детали: куда вы поехали, что вам понравилось, и краткое эмоциональное впечатление. Уберите звуки-паузы («umm») и лишние повторы («so much», «new moments»). Используйте точные выражения: «When I was a child», «we traveled to Baku, Azerbaijan», «it gave me lasting memories».

示例: Yes, I did. When I was a child, my family and I traveled to Baku, Azerbaijan. It was a beautiful city and the trip gave me lasting memories because I loved exploring the old streets and tasting local food.

× Yes, I prefer because I like so the beautiful sea or place when I travel in plan uh, for example, it's give me a new emotions and I like it so much.

✓ Yes, I prefer to sit by the window because I like seeing the beautiful sea or scenery when I travel by plane; for example, it gives me new emotions and I like it very much.

The sentence has multiple problems: incorrect word order, wrong prepositions, verb form errors, and article/quantifier misuse. Corrections made: 'prefer to sit by the window' uses the correct collocation; 'because I like seeing' uses verb + -ing after like; 'the beautiful sea or scenery' fixes article and noun choice; 'when I travel by plane' uses correct preposition and noun 'plane'; 'it gives me new emotions' corrects subject-verb agreement and noun number; 'very much' is the correct adverbial phrase. Suggestion: simplify sentences, use common collocations (travel by plane, prefer to sit), keep subject-verb agreement, and use 'seeing' after verbs of preference.

× Yes, I have a long journey with my family.

✓ Yes, I had long journeys with my family.

Use past simple 'had' to match the time reference 'as a child'. Also plural 'journeys' is more natural for repeated trips. Suggestion: use past tense for events in childhood and make number agree with context.

× When I was child umm we traveling traveled to the Azerbaijan, Baku.

✓ When I was a child, we traveled to Baku, Azerbaijan.

Need the article 'a' in 'a child'. Use past simple 'traveled' (not 'traveling') to describe completed past action. Country and city order is 'Baku, Azerbaijan' without 'the'. Suggestion: include articles where required and use simple past for past events; place city before country.

× It's a beautiful place and country and I like this so much and give me a new moments.

✓ It is a beautiful place and country, and I liked it very much; it gave me new experiences.

Tense should be past 'liked' and 'gave' to match 'we traveled'. 'Give me a new moments' is incorrect: subject-verb agreement and noun number; use 'gave me new experiences' or 'gave me new moments'. Also 'very much' instead of 'so much' is more natural in this context. Suggestion: keep tenses consistent, match singular/plural, and choose appropriate nouns like 'experiences'.