旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is direct and natural, but you can improve by adding one or two specific supporting details and a linking word to make it more coherent and informative. Also avoid small repetition ("window"/"windows") and keep it concise (max 5 sentences).

示例: Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when travelling because I enjoy seeing the changing scenery. For example, on long drives I like watching landscapes and small towns pass by, which helps me relax and pass the time.

建议: Your answer addresses the question and gives a specific detail, which is good. Improve clarity and grammar (e.g., "bought our first car"), use a linking word to contrast ideas, and briefly add one more detail about the trip to enrich the response without overlong sentences.

示例: I didn’t have many long trips with the whole family, but I did travel about six hundred kilometres with my father when we bought our first car. That journey took almost eight hours, and I remember stopping at a small town for lunch and enjoying the new experience of a long road trip.

× Yes, I prefer to sit by the window while travelling because I love the view from the windows.

✓ Yes, I prefer to sit by the window while travelling because I love the view from the window.

The student used both the singular article form 'the window' and then plural 'the windows' inconsistently. The context refers to the same seat's view (singular), so 'the window' should be used both times. Use consistent article usage and number: 'the view from the window.'

× I never had a long journey with my whole family, but I had a journey of six hundred kilometers with my father in a car when we bought off our first car.

✓ I never had a long journey with my whole family, but I took a six-hundred-kilometre car trip with my father when we bought our first car.

Several issues: 'had a journey of six hundred kilometers' is grammatically acceptable but awkward; 'took a ... trip' is more natural. 'Bought off our first car' is incorrect—'bought' is the correct past tense and 'off' is unnecessary. Use 'when we bought our first car.' Also hyphenate 'six-hundred-kilometre' as a compound adjective before a noun. Ensure verb choice and collocation are natural in past tense.