旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cần nói rõ và mạch lạc hơn. Tránh tiếng “uh” nhiều lần, dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng: nêu sở thích (ví dụ: có/không) và lý do cụ thể. Sắp xếp ý theo thứ tự: câu trả lời trực tiếp → lý do chính → ví dụ ngắn. Dùng từ vựng chính xác (e.g. 'travel by car or bus', 'I feel sick' thay vì 'getting trouble'). Giữ độ dài tối đa 3–4 câu, sử dụng liên từ (because, so, therefore) để nối ý.

示例: Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I travel because I often get travel sick if I sit in the middle. For example, on long bus trips I like to look outside and get some fresh air, which helps me feel better.

建议: Cần trả lời trực tiếp rõ ràng (Yes/No), và mô tả chi tiết cụ thể hơn. Tránh lặp từ và tiếng ngập ngừng. Sắp xếp ý: trả lời → mô tả nơi/độ dài/thời gian → cảm nhận hoặc kỷ niệm ngắn. Dùng thì phù hợp (past simple) và từ vựng chính xác (e.g. 'short trips', 'a two-day, one-night stay', 'we had fun').

示例: No, we usually had short trips rather than long journeys when I was a child. For example, my family often went to a nearby beach for two days and one night, and we had a great time playing on the sand and eating local food.

× Uh, yes, uh, because actually I'm getting trouble, uh, with. Car so when I go to travel or go to for a walk by car, bus or.

✓ Yes. Actually, I have trouble with cars, so when I travel by car or bus I prefer to sit by the window.

The original sentence has multiple sentence structure issues: fragments, misplaced words, and incorrect verb form 'I'm getting trouble' which is unnatural. Use 'I have trouble with cars' (present simple) to describe a general difficulty. Remove filler 'uh' and reorganize the clauses: 'so when I travel by car or bus, I prefer to sit by the window.' This produces a complete, grammatical sentence. Suggestion: Practice forming a clear main clause and subordinate clause: Subject + verb + object, then reason introduced by 'so' or 'because'.

× Actually, it's not a long journey, it's umm, short journey is where the went to town beach and where the two days, one night, they're incredible and that is only play with having to have been together.

✓ Actually, it wasn't a long journey. It was a short trip to the town beach for two days and one night. It was incredible, and we just enjoyed being together.

The original contains wrong tense use and multiple structural errors. 'It's not a long journey' should be past tense 'it wasn't a long journey' because the question asks about childhood experiences. 'Short journey is where the went to town beach' has missing subject and wrong word order; replace with 'It was a short trip to the town beach.' 'Where the two days, one night' should be expressed as 'for two days and one night.' 'They're incredible and that is only play with having to have been together' is ungrammatical; intended meaning is past enjoyment, so use past 'It was incredible, and we just enjoyed being together.' Suggestion: When describing past events, consistently use past tense and simple sentences, then combine with connectors.