旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve grammatical accuracy and complete the idea. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons using linking words. Correct verb phrases (e.g., "when I travel" not "when travelling" in this context is acceptable but be consistent) and fix article/use errors ("take the bus" or "travel by bus"). Also finish your sentence and avoid trailing off. Aim for 2–3 sentences, use connectors like "because" or "so" and add a brief specific detail or example.

示例: I prefer to sit by the window when I travel. For example, when I travel by bus I like the window seat because I can enjoy the scenery and get some fresh air, which helps me relax during long journeys.

建议: Make the answer more natural and specific. Begin with a direct yes/no response, then give a specific example or detail. Improve grammar and word choice (e.g., "we often took long journeys" instead of "had a long journey a lot"; "create good memories" rather than "make the good memory"). Use a linking phrase like "for example" or "for instance" to introduce details and keep it to 2–3 sentences.

示例: Yes, we often took long journeys when I was a child. For example, every summer my parents drove us to the coast for a week so we could spend time together and make lasting family memories.

× I definitely prefer to sit by the window when travelling, even when I take by bus because sitting by the window can get the fresh air or I can see the

✓ I definitely prefer to sit by the window when travelling, even when I take the bus, because sitting by the window lets me get fresh air and see the view.

Errors involved incorrect verb patterns and awkward phrasing. 'take by bus' is incorrect preposition and article use; correct is 'take the bus' (Grammar problem type ID 11 and 22), but per instruction only correct items from the provided list: the main fix addressed is using the verb + -ing form 'sitting' correctly as a gerund phrase functioning as a subject/complement and replacing 'can get the fresh air or I can see the' with a more natural coordinated verb structure: 'lets me get fresh air and see the view.' Suggestion: use gerund phrases as subjects or objects without adding unnecessary modals, ensure prepositions and articles are correct (use 'take the bus'), and complete sentences with a final noun or clause to express what you can see.

× Yes, I did. When I was a child my family had a long journey a lot because my family wanted to make the good memory with me as a child.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was a child my family often took long journeys because they wanted to make good memories with me.

The sentence had incorrect past-tense verb choice and awkward adverb placement. 'Had a long journey a lot' is ungrammatical; use 'often took long journeys' to express repeated past actions (Past tense issue ID 5). Also 'make the good memory' is incorrect noun phrase and article use; 'make good memories' is natural. Suggestion: use appropriate past-tense verbs for habitual actions (often + past simple), avoid repeating unnecessary phrases like 'with me as a child.'