旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Clarify meaning, correct vocabulary and grammar, use a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details with linking words. Avoid ambiguity (e.g. “no seat”, “lawn tour”) and reduce run-on sentences. Aim for 2–4 concise sentences: one direct answer and 1–2 specific reasons or examples, joined with linking words like “because”, “so”, or “for example.”

示例: Yes, I usually prefer to sit by the window when I travel by plane because I enjoy the views. For example, I like watching the sunrise or sunset from above, which I find very relaxing and peaceful.

建议: Make the answer coherent and factually consistent, correct place names and prepositions, and provide one clear supporting detail. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add a specific memory or detail linked with words like “for example” or “because.” Avoid contradictory or incorrect location references (e.g. Hangok vs. China vs. Syria).

示例: Yes, I did. When I was in primary school my family flew to Hangzhou, a historic city in China, which was far from our hometown. For example, I remember seeing the West Lake and feeling excited by the long flight and new sights.

× I prefer the no seat due to the beautiful scenery.

✓ I prefer the window seat because of the beautiful scenery.

The original uses an incorrect article and noun phrase 'the no seat'. English requires a specific noun: 'window seat'. Also 'due to' is better replaced by 'because of' for clarity here. Suggestion: use 'the window seat' or 'a window seat' depending on context; here 'the window seat' fits the preference.

× I can see the sunset or sunrise it's really relaxing especially in a lawn tour.

✓ I can see the sunset or sunrise, and it's really relaxing, especially on a long tour.

This sentence is a run-on lacking proper connectors and has word choice errors: 'lawn tour' is incorrect; likely intended 'long tour'. Add a comma and a coordinating conjunction 'and' to join clauses, and use 'on a long tour' for correct preposition and adjective.

× Did you have a long journey with your family as a child?

✓ Did you have long journeys with your family as a child?

This question is grammatical but may need plural 'journeys' if asking about repeated trips. Pluralization clarifies meaning. If referring to a single trip, original is acceptable. No past participle needed; flagged to follow instruction to only correct per list items.

× When I studied in primary school, my parents took me to travel to Hangok, a famous city in China.

✓ When I was in primary school, my parents took me to Hangok, a famous city in China.

'Studied in primary school' is not idiomatic for describing being a student then; use 'was in primary school'. Also 'took me to travel to Hangok' is awkward; 'took me to Hangok' or 'we traveled to Hangok' is correct. Use simple past 'took' for completed action.

× It's really far from my hometown so we took airplane to visit Syria.

✓ It was really far from my hometown, so we flew by airplane to visit Syria.

Tense consistency: 'It's' should be 'It was' for past narrative. 'Took airplane' is incorrect; use 'flew by airplane' or 'took a plane'. Also punctuation: add a comma before 'so'. Suggest: 'we flew to Syria' or 'we took a plane to Syria'.