旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and use a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using a linking word. Avoid repetition (e.g., saying "window" and "window seat"). Also vary vocabulary (e.g., "prefer" → "used to like") and include a brief reason to make the answer more informative.

示例: I used to prefer the window seat when travelling because I enjoyed watching the scenery. However, now I usually choose whichever seat is comfortable, especially on long flights when legroom matters.

建议: Start with a direct topic sentence stating the trip, then add specific details and linkers (e.g., "for example", "because") to make the story vivid. Avoid vague phrases like "quite a long time"—give concrete duration or one specific memory to strengthen content and coherence.

示例: Yes, when I was a child my family took a long trip to Australia to visit my aunt, who was working there as a nurse. For example, we stayed for three months and during that time we went hiking in national parks and visited the Great Barrier Reef, which was unforgettable.

× Now I prefer sitting in any seat as long as it is comfortable.

✓ Now I prefer to sit in any seat as long as it is comfortable.

The verb 'prefer' is typically followed by the infinitive 'to' when expressing a general preference (prefer to do something) or by the gerund when comparing two actions (prefer doing X to doing Y). Here the sentence states a general preference, so 'to sit' is more natural and grammatically appropriate. Suggestion: use 'prefer to sit' for general preferences.

× I remember the last time I went on a plane I sat next to the window.

✓ I remember that the last time I went on a plane I sat next to the window.

The original sentence is understandable but needs a subordinating conjunction to join the clauses clearly. Adding 'that' after 'remember' makes the sentence grammatically complete and more natural in formal English. Also consider adding a comma after the subordinate clause if the sentence is long. Suggestion: include 'that' after reporting verbs like 'remember' when introducing a clause.

× Yes, I remember a few years ago my family and I traveled to Australia to visit my aunt who was working there as a nurse.

✓ Yes, I remember that a few years ago my family and I traveled to Australia to visit my aunt, who was working there as a nurse.

Like the previous sentence, 'remember' should be followed by 'that' to introduce the clause clearly. Additionally, the clause 'who was working there as a nurse' is a nonrestrictive relative clause giving extra information about the aunt and should be set off with a comma. Suggestion: use 'that' after 'remember' and add a comma before 'who' for nonrestrictive clauses.

× Yes, as a child I did prefer to sit next to the window seat to see the view.

✓ Yes, as a child I did prefer to sit in the window seat to see the view.

The usual preposition for being located inside a seat on a plane is 'in' (sit in the window seat) rather than 'next to' when referring to the specific 'window seat'. 'Next to the window' would be acceptable if referring to a seat beside a window in a different context, but with 'window seat' the correct collocation is 'in the window seat.' Suggestion: use 'in the window seat' when referring to that specific seat on a plane.