旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng hơn, tránh lặp từ và lỗi ngữ pháp; bổ sung câu chủ đề mạch lạc và một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể kèm liên từ để câu trôi chảy. Ví dụ: loại bỏ các lặp như “I can I can”, dùng dấu phẩy hoặc liên từ phù hợp, và nêu lý do cụ thể (ví dụ: thích chụp ảnh hoặc thư giãn).

示例: Yes, I prefer a window seat because I enjoy watching the scenery. For example, on trains I like to see the countryside pass by, and on planes I enjoy watching the clouds and sunrise, which helps me relax.

建议: Cần cải thiện cấu trúc câu và ngữ pháp (thời quá khứ), tránh lỗi như ‘to because’; cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể về hành trình (khi nào, với ai, hoạt động đã làm) và dùng liên từ để nối ý. Hãy tách thành câu chủ đề và câu bổ trợ, nêu ví dụ về hoạt động cụ thể trong chuyến đi.

示例: Yes, I did. When I was a child, my family traveled to Danang and Hoi An for a holiday because we wanted to relax. We spent time on the beach, tried local food, and visited historical sites, which made the trip memorable.

× Yes I do because when I sit by the window So in the train, the plane or the bus I can I can see a bright sky or beautiful landscape.

✓ Yes, I do because when I sit by the window in a train, plane, or bus I can see a bright sky or beautiful landscapes.

The original sentence has an unnecessary capitalized 'So' and repetition 'I can I can'. Also 'in the train, the plane or the bus' is awkward; use 'in a train, plane, or bus' for general cases and plural 'landscapes' sounds more natural for varied views. Remove the extra 'So' and duplicate verb. Suggestions: delete filler words, avoid repeating verbs, use articles 'a' for general situations, and pluralize countable nouns when referring to multiple instances. Grammar focus: gerund/participle issues arise when extra words interrupt the verb phrase; here the error is mainly sentence structure and redundancy which affect verb forms.

× Yes, I did when I was a child my family travelled to Danang or Hojun city to because we all want to relax and enjoy holiday.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was a child, my family travelled to Danang or Hoi An to relax and enjoy a holiday.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses and has extra words 'to because'. Use past tense consistently: 'travelled' and 'wanted' or keep 'we wanted to relax'. Also correct place name 'Hojun' to likely 'Hoi An' (if intended); remove redundant 'to' before 'because' and use article 'a' before 'holiday'. Suggestions: keep tense consistent (past for past events), remove unnecessary conjunctions, and include articles for singular countable nouns.