旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cải thiện: Tránh lặp từ và lỗi ngữ pháp; trả lời trực tiếp bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó bổ sung 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể. Dùng liên từ phù hợp (because, so, and) để liên kết ý. Chú ý thì động từ (it made → it makes) và loại bỏ từ thừa. Ví dụ thực tế: nêu loại phương tiện, kiểu cảnh bạn thích chụp và cách bạn nghỉ ngơi.

示例: I usually prefer a window seat when travelling because it makes the journey more enjoyable. For example, on flights I like watching the clouds and taking clear photos of landscapes, and on trains I can rest while enjoying the passing scenery.

建议: Cải thiện: Trả lời cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc; bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trả lời "Yes" hoặc "No" kèm tóm tắt ngắn. Tránh tiếng ums/ahs và sửa ngữ pháp và cấu trúc (ví dụ: "most unforgettable trip" đủ rồi, không cần từ thừa). Thêm 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể (đi đâu, với ai, điều gì đáng nhớ) và dùng liên từ để nối ý. Luyện nói liền mạch và chuẩn xác các động từ quá khứ.

示例: Yes, I had a long journey with my family when I was a child. We drove to the coast for a week-long holiday, and I still remember exploring the beach, eating local food, and spending evenings playing games with my siblings, which made it unforgettable.

× Well, I prioritize sitting by the window when traveling because it it made my trip more enjoyable and exciting.

✓ Well, I prioritize sitting by the window when traveling because it makes my trip more enjoyable and exciting.

The sentence mixes present tense 'prioritize' with past tense 'made'. Use simple present 'makes' to match habitual action. Also there is a duplicated word 'it it'. Suggestion: remove the duplicate and use 'makes' for present habitual situations.

× When sitting by the window, I can take photos clearly and take a rest.

✓ When sitting by the window, I can take clear photos and rest.

'Take photos clearly' is awkward; use the adjective 'clear' before 'photos'. 'Take a rest' is grammatical but 'rest' is more natural here. The gerund phrase 'When sitting by the window' is correct and kept.

× Of course, it was actually the most unforgettable trip to buy.

✓ Of course, it was actually the most unforgettable trip I have ever taken.

'Trip to buy' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'trip I have ever taken'. Use present perfect 'have ever taken' to express life experience up to now. Also keep 'most unforgettable' for emphasis.

× I had experience with my family.

✓ I had the experience with my family.

The original is vague. If referring to a specific trip, use 'the experience' or better: 'I had the experience with my family on that trip.' Using 'the' specifies the particular experience.

× I what makes the what make this trip, umm, truly memorable to me is that, uh, I can enjoy, umm, the beautiful.

✓ What made this trip truly memorable to me was that I could enjoy the beautiful scenery.

Original is fragmented and has tense/person confusion and missing noun. Use past tense 'made' and 'was' because the examiner asked about a past journey. Replace vague 'the beautiful' with 'the beautiful scenery'. Remove filler words and fix word order: 'What made this trip truly memorable to me was that I could enjoy the beautiful scenery.'