旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is relevant but has grammatical errors, redundancy and unclear phrasing. Keep answers concise (max 5 sentences). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific reason with a linking word and a brief example. Correct common errors: use 'because' instead of 'cause', 'scenery' (uncountable) or 'scenes', and avoid repetition like 'scenic and coming scene'.

示例: Yes, I usually prefer a window seat when I travel because I enjoy the views. For example, on train journeys I can watch changing landscapes like fields and rivers, which helps me relax. Also, it’s easier to take photos from the window, so I often capture memorable moments.

建议: The answer addresses the question but has grammar mistakes, unclear time expressions and unnecessary words. Use a clear topic sentence then add one or two specific details with linking words. Correct plural/singular forms and prepositions (e.g., 'journeys', 'every year', 'went to visit'). Avoid vague phrases like 'taka' (typo) and be specific about activities or feelings.

示例: Yes, we often had long family journeys when I was a child. Every December after my final exams, we would drive to visit my cousins and my mother’s friend, and we spent the week sightseeing and celebrating together, which was always a lot of fun.

× Yes, I always prefer to sit by the window when traveling cause the window state gives us the scenic and coming scene of the road and highways such as in in term of train journey.

✓ Yes, I always prefer to sit by the window when traveling because the window seat gives us scenic views of the road and highways, for example on a train journey.

Type 16: The student used 'cause' informally and 'such as in in term of' incorrectly. Also 'window state' is incorrect word choice. Use 'because' for clearer conjunction; use 'window seat' and 'scenic views' for correct nouns; use 'for example' or 'such as' properly. Suggestion: replace informal 'cause' with 'because' and restructure the phrase to 'for example on a train journey' to make the sentence grammatically correct and natural.

× We can have many beautiful sceneries sitting by the window.

✓ We can see many beautiful scenes while sitting by the window.

Type 1: 'Scenery' is an uncountable noun and normally not pluralized as 'sceneries'; 'see' is more natural than 'have' in this context. Also use 'while' instead of the gerund phrase 'sitting by the window' for fluency. Suggestion: use 'scenes' or 'scenery' (uncountable) and verb 'see' to describe perceiving views.

× Yes, we had several long journey with my family as a child.

✓ Yes, we had several long journeys with my family when I was a child.

Type 5: 'Journey' should be plural 'journeys' to match 'several'; 'as a child' is less natural here—use 'when I was a child'; also ensure subject agreement with 'we' referring to family trips in the past. Suggestion: pluralize countable nouns after quantifiers like 'several' and use clearer temporal phrase.

× Once in every year after completing my final examination on December, we used to go taka to visit our cousins and my mother's friend and we used to have so much fun over there.

✓ Once every year after completing my final examinations in December, we used to go to visit our cousins and my mother's friend, and we used to have so much fun there.

Type 11: Several preposition and article errors: use 'once every year' (not 'once in every year'), 'in December' (not 'on December'), and 'go to visit' or simply 'go to' (not 'go taka'). Also 'final examination' should be plural 'final examinations' if referring to multiple subjects or use 'final exam' singular consistently. Remove redundant 'over' in 'over there'. Suggestion: use correct prepositions for time ('in December') and frequency ('once every year'), correct verb phrase 'go to visit', and clean up redundancy.