旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be careful with grammar (singular/plural and verb forms) and reduce minor redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Vary vocabulary (e.g., 'scenery' without 'a', 'photographs' or 'photos') and correct small errors: 'which make' → 'which makes', 'take a photos' → 'take photos' or 'take a photo'. Keep answer within 2–4 concise sentences.

示例: Yes, I usually choose a window seat because I enjoy watching the scenery, which makes me feel relaxed and refreshed. For example, I like photographing sunsets and sunlit landscapes from the window because the light often creates beautiful colors.

建议: Improve tense consistency and grammar, and make details more specific. Use past tense for childhood experiences ('I often had'), correct subject-verb agreement ('my family enjoy' → 'my family enjoyed' or 'my family likes'), and phrasing ('prefer to travel'). Add a linking word to connect reason and give one concrete example of a trip. Keep it concise (2–4 sentences).

示例: Yes, I often had long journeys with my family when I was a child because we loved exploring different countries in Asia. For example, we regularly visited Thailand and Vietnam, and my mother preferred returning to places she knew well so we could relax and explore local food together.

× This is because I enjoy looking at a beautiful scenery which make me feel refreshed and relaxed.

✓ This is because I enjoy looking at beautiful scenery which makes me feel refreshed and relaxed.

'Scenery' is an uncountable noun and does not take the article 'a'. Also the relative clause subject 'scenery' is singular so the verb should be 'makes' to agree in number. Suggestion: omit 'a' before uncountable nouns like 'scenery' and use 'makes' for singular subjects.

× Sometimes I also like to take a photos of the views from the window, especially sunlight and sunset.

✓ Sometimes I also like to take photos of the views from the window, especially of the sunlight and the sunset.

'Photos' is plural so do not use the article 'a' before it. Also when referring to specific phenomena like 'sunlight' and 'sunset' in this context, add the definite article 'the' to indicate specific instances viewed through the window, and include 'of' after 'especially' to link the phrase. Suggestion: use 'take photos' and 'the sunlight/the sunset' for clarity.

× Yes, I often have a long journey with my family since I was a child.

✓ Yes, I often had long journeys with my family when I was a child.

The time expression 'since I was a child' requires perfect aspect if continuing to the present (e.g., 'have had since'), but the speaker is referring to past habitual actions, so simple past 'had' and plural 'journeys' are appropriate. Also 'often' with past habit takes past tense. Suggestion: use past tense 'had' and plural 'journeys' for repeated events in childhood.

× This is because my family enjoy traveling around the world, especially in Asia.

✓ This is because my family enjoys traveling around the world, especially in Asia.

Collective noun 'family' is treated as singular in American English, so the verb should be 'enjoys' to agree with the singular subject. Suggestion: use 'my family enjoys' (or 'my family members enjoy' if you want a plural verb).

× My mother prefer to traveling in the country that she's familiar with such.

✓ My mother prefers to travel in countries that she's familiar with.

After 'prefer', use the infinitive 'to travel' (not 'to traveling'). Also 'prefer' must agree with singular subject 'my mother' so use 'prefers.' The phrase 'the country that she's familiar with such' is ungrammatical; use plural 'countries' and place 'that she's familiar with' after it. Suggestion: use 'prefers to travel in countries that she's familiar with.'