旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make the answer more natural and grammatically correct, add a brief reason with a linking word, and avoid redundancy. Keep it within 2–3 concise sentences.

示例: Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I travel because I enjoy watching the scenery pass by. For example, on short trips I like spotting interesting buildings and landscapes outside, which makes the journey more enjoyable.

建议: Correct verb tense and complete the thought. Start with a clear topic sentence, use past tense for childhood events, add a specific detail or memory, and finish the sentence to avoid trailing off.

示例: Yes, when I was a child my family and I went on a long trip to Manali. It was a wonderful journey because we hiked in the mountains and spent evenings together by a campfire, which I still remember fondly.

× Yes I prefer to sit by window when traveling closer because I can see everything through the window.

✓ Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when traveling nearby because I can see everything through the window.

Missing definite article 'the' before 'window' is incorrect; 'by window' should be 'by the window'. 'Closer' is not idiomatic here for describing proximity of travel; use 'nearby' or omit it. Also add commas for clarity. Suggestion: use 'the' with specific nouns and use 'nearby' or rephrase 'when traveling' to match meaning.

× Yes, as a child, my family and I go to a long journey to Manali.

✓ Yes, as a child, my family and I went on a long journey to Manali.

The speaker refers to a past event, so present tense 'go' is incorrect. Use simple past 'went'. Also English uses 'go on a journey' rather than 'go a journey', so include 'on'. 'Long journey' is fine; add 'on' to form the correct collocation. Suggestion: for past experiences use past tense verbs and common verb+preposition collocations ('went on a journey').

× It was a very wonderful journey and

✓ It was a wonderful journey.

The sentence ends with 'and' leaving it incomplete. Remove the conjunction or complete the thought. 'Very wonderful' is redundant — 'wonderful' alone is enough or use 'very' with a different adjective (e.g., 'very enjoyable'). Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments and redundant modifiers; finish clauses or remove trailing conjunctions.