旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is natural, relevant and concise. To improve further, make your topic sentence slightly stronger and vary vocabulary (e.g., use 'prefer' variations or specific adjectives). Add one linking phrase to connect the general preference to the examples, and avoid repeating 'I' at the start of multiple clauses. Keep within 3–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I usually prefer the window seat when I travel because I enjoy the views and it gives me a bit more privacy. For example, on flights I like photographing the changing landscapes, and on long train journeys I enjoy watching the countryside roll by.

建议: Content is relevant and personal, but there are grammar and coherence issues. Improve tense consistency (use past tense), correct collocations ('watch the stars' not 'watch the star on the sky'), and use linking words to connect ideas. Make sentences more concise and avoid unnecessary repetition. Aim for 2–4 clear sentences with specific details (e.g., what made it exciting).

示例: Yes. When I was a child my parents often drove me to my grandmother's house in Taichung, which was about a three-hour journey. I would always sit by the window and watch the countryside pass by, and sometimes I enjoyed looking at the stars at night, which felt very exciting.

× And also I enjoy to watch the star on the sky and it was so exciting.

✓ And also I enjoy watching the stars in the sky; it was so exciting.

The verb 'enjoy' is followed by a gerund (-ing form), not an infinitive. Use 'enjoy watching' instead of 'enjoy to watch'. Also 'star' should be plural 'stars' when speaking generally, and the correct preposition is 'in the sky'. Replace the conjunction and punctuation to join the ideas clearly: use a semicolon or separate sentences. Suggestions: use 'enjoy watching', pluralize countable nouns when appropriate, and use correct prepositions ('in the sky').

× We usually took a three hour trip and I would always sit by the window looking at the countryside.

✓ We usually took a three-hour trip and I would always sit by the window looking at the countryside.

When a compound adjective precedes a noun, use hyphens: 'three-hour trip'. The phrase 'three hour' without hyphens is a punctuation/formatting error affecting plural usage. Suggestion: hyphenate multiword adjectives before nouns ('three-hour trip').

× my parents often drove me to my grandmother's house in Taichung.

✓ My parents often drove me to my grandmother's house in Taichung.

The sentence is grammatically correct in preposition choice but needs capitalization at the start. No change to preposition 'to' is required. Suggestion: ensure sentence-initial capitalization.