旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Говоря на вопросы, концентрируйтесь на простых и ясных предложениях. Начните с прямого ответа (Yes/No + причина), затем добавьте 1–2 конкретных деталей. Избегайте ненужных пауз и бессмысленных слов (umm, uh). Работа над формами глаголов и лексикой: вместо «I traveling» используйте «I am travelling» или «I travel», и не говорите «I can see the future» — используйте конкретные наблюдения. Практикуйте связки (because, so, for example) для логического перехода между идеями.

示例: Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I travel because I enjoy looking at the scenery. For example, I like to watch the coastline and mountains pass by, which helps me relax. Also, sitting by the window allows me to take photos more easily.

建议: Стройте ответ с четкой темой: сначала краткий ответ (Yes/No + краткая причина), затем 1–2 конкретных деталей. Избегайте повторов («I was I was») и неправильного порядка слов. Уточняйте факты (когда, куда, что запомнили) и используйте связки (when, so, but) аккуратно. Работайте над грамматикой простых прошедших форм (we went, it was) и порядком слов в предложении.

示例: Yes, I had a long journey with my family when I was a child. We went to Turkey and stayed there for two weeks, visiting beaches and historical sites. I don't remember everything clearly because I was very young, but I still remember swimming in the sea and eating local food.

× I really prefer to sit by the window when I traveling because it sits favorite umm, sitting true, uh, sitting, umm, uh, preneasable crochet.

✓ I really prefer to sit by the window when I am traveling because it is my favorite seat.

The original sentence incorrectly mixes present simple 'prefer' with an uninflected verb 'traveling' lacking auxiliary 'am'. Use present continuous 'am traveling' after 'when' to describe the action in progress. 'It sits favorite' is ungrammatical; use 'it is my favorite seat'. Remove filler words and unclear fragments. Suggestions: use subject + auxiliary + present participle for ongoing actions (I am traveling), and use 'is my favorite seat' to state preference.

× I really love this sitting because I can see the future.

✓ I really love this seat because I can see outside/see the view.

'This sitting' is not a correct noun phrase in English. Use 'this seat' or 'sitting here' depending on intended meaning. Also 'see the future' is unlikely intended; likely meant 'see outside' or 'see the view'. Suggestion: replace incorrect noun with 'seat' and use a realistic verb object like 'the view' or 'outside'.

× I can see what's we.

✓ I can see what is outside.

The fragment 'what's we' is ungrammatical. Possibly the speaker attempted 'what's new' or 'what's there' or 'what we see'. To fit context, use 'what is outside' or 'what's there'. Maintain present simple 'can see' with noun clause 'what is outside'.

× When I was a child I had a long journey with my family, each journey to talk we are journey to Turkey and the so perfect travel.

✓ When I was a child, I took a long trip with my family; one trip was to Turkey and it was a wonderful trip.

The speaker mixes tenses and uses incorrect verbs ('had a long journey' is awkward but acceptable, better 'took a long trip') and ungrammatical fragments ('each journey to talk we are journey to Turkey'). Use simple past ('took') to describe completed actions in childhood. Replace 'the so perfect travel' with 'it was a wonderful trip'. Suggestions: use clear past-tense verbs and concise clauses: 'I took a long trip... one trip was to Turkey.'

× But I can't remember all things we do because I was I was very small as in now.

✓ But I can't remember everything we did because I was very small then.

The clause mixes present 'can't remember' with incorrect tense in the subordinate clause and redundant 'I was I was' and wrong time phrase 'as in now'. To describe inability to recall past events, keep present perfect/simple present ('I can't remember') and use simple past for the past action ('we did'). Use 'then' to refer to that past time. Remove repeated words. Suggestions: write 'But I can't remember everything we did because I was very small then.'