旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is clear and relevant, but can be more concise and natural. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using a linking word. Avoid repetition (e.g., “stop the headaches and the dizziness” could be shortened) and correct minor awkward phrasing like “while you're driving” (use “when travelling” or “on the journey”).

示例: Yes, I prefer a window seat because I get motion sickness. For example, looking outside helps me focus on a fixed point, which reduces the headaches and dizziness during long journeys.

建议: Good enthusiasm and content, but make the structure tighter: open with a direct answer, then give specific details. Avoid vague phrases like “a couple of ten hour driving” — be precise (e.g., “several ten-hour drives”). Use linking words (e.g., “for example” or “we often”) to connect ideas and correct small grammar issues.

示例: Yes, we often had long journeys when I was a child. For example, my family made several ten-hour drives between states and we also took international flights, so I grew up travelling a lot.

× This is because I suffer from motion sickness and sitting by the window just helps me balance and stop the headaches and the dizziness that I feel due to the motion while you're driving.

✓ This is because I suffer from motion sickness, and sitting by the window helps me balance and stop the headaches and dizziness that I feel due to the motion when I'm traveling.

Errors: 'just helps me balance and stop the headaches and the dizziness' is awkward and uses extra articles; 'while you're driving' is inconsistent with the student's perspective and mixes pronouns and tenses. Classification: verb in the present participle form (10) because 'sitting' is used correctly as a gerund but surrounding structure is ungrammatical/awkward. Suggestion: remove 'just', remove the second 'the', use 'when I'm traveling' or 'when I travel' to match first-person perspective and present tense. Use commas to separate clauses.

× My family, I call them the great travellers, so we love travelling from one state to another.

✓ My family—whom I call the great travellers—loves travelling from one state to another.

Errors: incorrect clause insertion and subject-verb agreement. Classification: sentence structure errors (26) because the appositive is incorrect; also 'we' conflicts with singular 'family' concept. Suggestion: use a relative clause 'whom I call...' or rephrase with commas, and make verb agree with 'family' as a collective noun: 'loves' or change subject to 'we love' if you mean family members individually.

× So we have done a couple of ten hour driving, flying out of the country as well.

✓ So we have taken a couple of ten-hour drives, and we have flown out of the country as well.

Errors: 'a couple of ten hour driving' mixes singular/plural and wrong noun form. Classification: singular and plural issue (1) because 'driving' should be the noun 'drive' and needs plural 'drives'; 'ten-hour' needs a hyphen as a compound adjective. Suggestion: use 'taken a couple of ten-hour drives' or 'done a couple of ten-hour journeys' and separate the ideas with 'and' to include flying as another activity.