旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct vocabulary; avoid fillers and small mistakes. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting reasons using linking words. Correct errors ("wind window" → "window", remove stray "1") and replace fillers like "Umm" with pauses. Keep answer within 2–4 sentences.

示例: I prefer to sit by the window when travelling because I enjoy the view and the privacy it offers. For example, on long flights I can rest against the wall and look outside without being disturbed, which helps me relax and avoid frequent trips to the aisle.

建议: Provide a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitations and vague language, and add one specific detail or memory to make the answer more vivid. Use a linking word to contrast past and present if needed. Correct minor grammar and finish the sentence cleanly.

示例: Yes, I had a long journey with my family when I was a child; we flew to the south of China and the flight took about three hours. At the time it felt very long because I was small and bored, but looking back it was actually quite short compared with today’s long-haul trips.

× I think the wind window seats are better for introverts, which I am 1.

✓ I think the window seats are better for introverts, which I am.

The word 'wind' is an incorrect adjective here—likely a typo. 'Window seats' is the correct noun phrase. Remove the erroneous word to make the sentence clear. Suggestion: proofread for accidental extra words and ensure adjective modifies the correct noun.

× Umm you can enjoy the view and at the same time no one is going to bug you to use the bathroom or in anything like that.

✓ You can enjoy the view, and at the same time no one will bug you to use the bathroom or ask you to do anything like that.

The original sentence is awkward and has an incorrect phrase 'bug you to use the bathroom or in anything like that.' The correction fixes sentence structure by using the future simple 'will bug' for prediction and replaces 'in anything like that' with 'ask you to do anything like that' to complete the idea. Suggestion: use clear verb phrases after 'bug you' (e.g., 'bug you to do something' or 'ask you to do something').

× I do prefer to sit at the window seat.

✓ I do prefer to sit in the window seat.

The preposition 'at' is less natural here; 'in the window seat' or 'in a window seat' is idiomatic for airplane seating. This is a prepositional choice tied to present preference. Suggestion: use 'in' with specific seat locations (in the window seat) or 'in a window seat' if non-specific.

× Yeah, I think we traveled to the South of China when I was young and it took us, I don't know, maybe 3 hours of flight to get there.

✓ Yeah, I think we traveled to the south of China when I was young and it took us, I don't know, maybe a 3-hour flight to get there.

The phrase '3 hours of flight' is unidiomatic. Use a compound adjective '3-hour flight' or say 'three hours by flight.' Also 'south' is not a proper noun here so lowercase is preferable unless it's part of an official region name. Suggestion: use 'a 3-hour flight' or 'three hours by plane' for natural phrasing.

× It wasn't considered that long in today's scale, but back then it felt very long when I was.

✓ It wasn't considered that long by today's standards, but back then it felt very long to me.

'In today's scale' is incorrect collocation; the idiomatic expression is 'by today's standards.' The clause 'when I was' is incomplete; finish with 'to me' to express personal feeling. Suggestion: use standard phrases like 'by today's standards' and ensure clauses are complete (e.g., 'it felt very long to me').