旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cải thiện ngữ pháp, phát âm và tính tự nhiên bằng cách dùng cấu trúc câu đúng (ví dụ: "I really like..."), tránh lặp từ và sử dụng liên từ phù hợp. Thêm chi tiết cụ thể hơn về những gì bạn thấy và cảm nhận để làm câu trả lời phong phú hơn. Hạn chế câu dài lủng củng, giữ tối đa 3-4 câu.

示例: I really prefer sitting by the window when I travel because I enjoy watching the changing landscape. For example, I like seeing mountains and rivers pass by, and I often take photos of the scenery to keep memories. This helps me relax and makes the journey more enjoyable.

建议: Sửa lỗi từ vựng và ngữ pháp (ví dụ bỏ từ không đúng như "eligory"), dùng thì quá khứ rõ ràng và thêm liên kết logic. Cung cấp thông tin cụ thể hơn (khi nào, với ai, cảm xúc) và tránh nhồi nhiều ý vào một câu; dùng 2-3 câu mạch lạc.

示例: Yes, I had a memorable long trip with my family when I was a child. We went to Nyacheng during the summer holidays, where we swam every day and ate a lot of fresh seafood. I still remember watching the sunset on the beach with my parents; it felt peaceful and relaxing.

× Yes, I very like to sit by the window when traveling because I can see the landscape.

✓ Yes, I really like to sit by the window when traveling because I can see the landscape.

The student used 'very like' which is not correct English. Use 'really' or 'very much' with 'like' in present tense: 'I really like' or 'I like ... very much.' This fixes word choice and makes the sentence natural. Suggestion: Use 'I really like' or 'I like ... very much.'

× In addition, I also take photo with the views so I so I always have many beautiful pictures.

✓ In addition, I also take photos of the views so I always have many beautiful pictures.

Errors: 'take photo' should be plural 'take photos' when referring to multiple pictures; 'with the views' is incorrect preposition, use 'of the views'; duplicate 'so I so I' is a repetition. Correct to 'so I always have many beautiful pictures.' Suggestion: Use plural for countable nouns and correct prepositions: 'take photos of the views.'

× Yes, I have the eligory with my friend.

✓ Yes, I had the holiday with my friend.

The student attempted to say they had a holiday but used 'have' (present) and a misspelled word 'eligory.' The question asks about the past, so use past tense 'had' and the correct noun 'holiday.' Suggestion: Use past simple 'I had' for completed past events and check spelling of 'holiday.'

× When I was a child, we went to Nyacheng in the summer holiday with swimming and ate a lot of seafood.

✓ When I was a child, we went to Nyacheng during the summer holiday, went swimming and ate a lot of seafood.

Parallel activities in the past should use the same verb form. The student wrote 'with swimming' which is awkward; better to say 'went swimming.' Also keep past simple for all actions: 'went' and 'ate.' Suggestion: Use parallel past verbs: 'went..., went..., and ate...'.

× In addition, we also saw sunset together.

✓ In addition, we also watched the sunset together.

'Saw sunset' is understandable but non-native; use 'watched the sunset' or 'saw the sunset.' If using 'saw,' include the article: 'saw the sunset.' Prefer 'watched the sunset together' to convey observing the event. Suggestion: Use appropriate verbs and articles: 'watched the sunset' or 'saw the sunset.'