旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve grammar and sentence structure, use a clear topic sentence, and add specific supporting details with linking words. Correct verb forms (e.g., 'prefer to sit', 'when I'm travelling'), articles (e.g., 'the window'), and plurality ('tree flowers' or 'trees and flowers'). Use one or two linking words (for example, 'because' or 'so') to connect ideas and keep the answer within 2–4 sentences.

示例: Yes — I prefer to sit by the window when I travel. I enjoy the view because I can see trees and flowers passing by, which feels relaxing, so sitting by the window makes the journey more enjoyable.

建议: Combine short fragments into coherent sentences, use past tense consistently, and add specific details (when, how often, what you did). Remove repetition and use linking words like 'and' or 'so' to create flow. Correct grammar: 'When I was a child, I always travelled with my parents and my brother,' and 'It was beautiful.'

示例: Yes, I did. When I was a child, I often travelled with my parents and my brother to Sham Beach, where we swam and had picnics, and the place was beautiful.

× Yes I do, I prefer sit by the window when I'm towering because when I see the outdoor of the window I can see the tree flower.

✓ Yes, I do. I prefer to sit by the window when I'm travelling because when I look out of the window I can see the trees and flowers.

Errors: missing infinitive 'to' after 'prefer' (Verb + -ing form / infinitive usage fits under present tense issue here), incorrect verb 'towering' should be 'travelling', awkward phrase 'see the outdoor of the window' should be 'look out of the window', singular 'tree flower' should be plural 'trees and flowers'. Suggestions: Use 'prefer to + verb' for preferences (prefer to sit), use correct vocabulary ('travelling'), use 'look out of the window' for viewing outside, and pluralize countable nouns when appropriate ('trees and flowers').

× It feel comfortable and it's sightseeing for me.

✓ It feels comfortable and it's a nice sight for me.

Errors: subject-verb agreement 'It feel' should be 'It feels' (also relates to subject-verb agreement but categorized here), 'sightseeing' is a verb/noun for activity and does not fit; use 'a nice sight' or 'sightseeing' rephrased. Suggestions: Ensure verb agrees with subject (adds -s in present simple for he/she/it), and use appropriate noun phrases ('a nice sight') or rephrase to 'I enjoy the sightseeing' if you mean the activity.

× Yes I did. When I was a child. I always travel with my family such as my parents and my brother.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was a child, I always travelled with my family, including my parents and my brother.

Errors: inconsistent tense and punctuation. 'When I was a child.' is a sentence fragment that needs to connect to the next clause. 'travel' should be past tense 'travelled' to match 'was' and 'did'. Suggestions: Keep past events in past tense, combine fragments with commas, and use 'including' or 'such as' correctly within the sentence.

× We usually go to the we usually went to the beach that is called Sham Beach.

✓ We usually went to a beach called Sham Beach.

Errors: repetition 'We usually go to the we usually went' and tense inconsistency. For past habitual actions use 'usually went'. Article and word order: 'the beach that is called Sham Beach' is wordy; use 'a beach called Sham Beach' or 'the beach called Sham Beach' depending on context. Suggestions: Remove repetition, choose consistent past tense for habitual past actions, and simplify relative clause to 'called Sham Beach'.

× It beautiful.

✓ It was beautiful.

Errors: missing verb 'is/was' before adjective. Because the context is past ('when I was a child'), use past tense 'was'. Suggestions: Always include a form of 'be' before adjectives describing a subject and match tense to context.