旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Reduce fillers and repetition; provide a clear topic sentence, one or two specific supporting reasons, and use linking words for coherence. Keep answers natural and within 3–4 sentences. For example, replace "umm" with a short pause, avoid repeating phrases, and add a brief specific detail about the view.

示例: Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when travelling because I can enjoy the changing scenery. For example, I like watching mountains and rivers pass by, which helps me relax. Also, sitting by the window makes it easier to take photos during the journey.

建议: Improve sentence structure and cohesion: start with a clear topic sentence, combine short fragments, use linking words (for example, "because" or "so") and add a specific example or memory. Avoid awkward phrases like "my family knows how" and aim for natural wording. Keep answer under five sentences.

示例: Yes, we often had long journeys when I was a child because my parents liked visiting relatives in the city. We usually travelled for about an hour, and I always sat by the window to watch the countryside. I remember once seeing a field full of sunflowers, which made the trip very memorable.

× Yes, I prefer to sleep by the window when we are traveling because I am able to see the view while we are traveling and also I appreciate umm. I appreciate the enjoyment here.

✓ Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when traveling because I can see the view and I enjoy it.

The original sentence repeats 'we are traveling' and uses awkward phrasing 'I appreciate umm. I appreciate the enjoyment here.' Replace present continuous 'we are traveling' with the gerund 'traveling' to match the general preference context (present simple). 'I am able to see' is wordy; use 'I can see'. Remove filler 'umm' and redundant clause; 'I enjoy it' is concise and natural. Use present simple for habitual preference: 'I prefer' and 'I can see'.

× As far as I can remember, we used to have a long journey as a family. When I was a child. We would travel at least an hour to a city and with that I am always by the window because my family knows how. I love seeing the scenery.

✓ As far as I can remember, we used to take long journeys as a family when I was a child. We would travel at least an hour to a city, and I was always by the window because I loved seeing the scenery.

The original contains sentence fragments ('When I was a child.'), awkward phrasing ('have a long journey', 'with that I am always by the window', 'my family knows how'), and tense inconsistencies. Use 'take long journeys' (idiomatic) and combine the time clause with the main sentence to avoid fragments. Change 'I am always' to 'I was always' to match the past context, and remove 'my family knows how' which is unclear. Use 'I loved seeing the scenery' to match habitual past (would + past).